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lucky
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0 posted 2001-03-02 03:34 AM


what

a mixed up screw ball life
legs stuffed Levis jean a soda
pop Crush the games with teens
I can’t figure what the purpose
is I feel like I’m takin’ some
kinda quiz... can you
tell me God..?
you know
I’d want
a please
understand
what it all means
I can’t hear all what your

sayin’ ‘cause this world’s a frosty freeze
It’s mad... It’s sad..! It doesn’t make no sense
I’m stuck in times with people that seem so dense
I need help can you find me..? will You look “cause
I can’t see..! There’s something special “bout this
place I feel the things, and I thought where to
look but it’s just to hard to give upon such

significance so I need your help
does that make sense..?
or am I just some
forsook

?

age 14


Don’t Worry

don’t worry everyone says...
my life is ahead unplanned and still
unaware don’t hurry things you must
realize..! listen I don’t know what
to do I’m hanging on a star
with no one to talk to
but God and it’s
so noisy I can’t

even hear if He’s said a
thing I’m years ahead of myself
much too small for any adulthood but
there’s reasons and that’s all I’ve heard
won't you just tell me..! I’m blind deaf
dumb and with out your voice... I’m
sure I belong.... at least some
where..! I know..! but, but
don’t worry everyone
says... just, don’t

worry

age 16


the ‘ol man of


winter can turn familiar territory into a
fantasy land or into a gleaming nightmare a
bearded man said as I sat close by drinking my
hot coffee right after a winter earthquake of two
thousand 1 and my surgery he said you got to

know many seasonal & winter skills which
will most certainly know and tell which
would determine a mountain man

from a city, he carried on for
it seemed like hours how
nothing was open 24
hours around the
clock except a
hospital many
miles away and
most likely the cops I
wondered if I was supposed

to be scared..?

2/28/2001



Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am.
To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight.
-Marge Tindal





[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 03-02-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Dale W. Gwaltney - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-02 06:03 AM


oh lucky...into my library. loved it all, but, those last two lines, made ME remember..."was I supposed to be scared?"

gotta grin there with some sadness...a bit of scared might have done me some good! lol..

excellent writing and I save for future reference...made me re-live a bit.

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2001-03-02 07:07 AM


Lucky~
Good morning, sweet and wonderful friend.
So very nice to read your words of reflection.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Wilfred Yeats
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3 posted 2001-03-02 10:02 AM


ohhh woweee wow -
Hey Dale - are you into the teen counseling biz?
your insights are so incredible and powerful - your talent is beyond belief/description. - don't waste it - please

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4 posted 2001-03-02 10:41 AM


Personal archives then, are something that should be kept and perused often. Good!
Martie
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5 posted 2001-03-02 01:28 PM


Dale--I'm with my sis Marge...so glad to see that lucky name and hear your treasured thoughts...hugs!
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6 posted 2001-03-02 02:02 PM


Very cool. I'm imagining a sculpture in the shape of your poem lying on the floor. And the rhythm reminded me very much of a seismograph/quake reading, so when I passed over the words "earthquake" I felt all excited. Yay! Anyway, awesome writing.

Mike

lucky
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7 posted 2001-03-03 03:50 AM


I'd tell you all thank you for your words, but I don't know if you'd get back around to see... But just in case... bless you all.

dale

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