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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Phantasmal embrace-- Arms molded from fibers of wind Coiling around my form... The gentle, illusory caress Casting a succession of shivers Fluttering across my skin. I allow my eyelids to fall And your luminescence to pull me Into catatonic bliss-- rendered paralyzed By the way your eyes send whispers Shooting deep into my soul. I can sense your breath Tingling...lingering upon my face As with an airy sigh I let your memory possess me And the ghosts of your fingers Traverse upon my curves. My tears subside for the moment That your image flickers here Within secluded daydreams For I can have you near-- like this Even if it’s only in my thoughts... *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow...your muse is back in full force!!! Love this.  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Though completely different in it's use of imagery in this piece compared to one of a tree that was so beautifully written by you, it's magnitude of impact is the same. Awesome write and I am sure it will be just as memorable as the other piece I mentioned. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Krista, would you send me over your Muse for like a day? only for a day! hehehe I can sense your breath Tingling...lingering upon my face As with an airy sigh I let your memory possess me And the ghosts of your fingers Traverse upon my curves. oh I love it it is beautiful left a wonderful feeling over me  [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Krista, even if they're only in our thoughts, that can help an awful lot...beautiful work. |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
When you find your muse there is nothing that can stop you I loved the title and things just got better from there. I think I know where you're coming from with this one, dear. I want to be that for you again. Beautiful poetry, my love, filled with flow and grace  "And every state of mind, left to itself, every shutting up of the creature within the dungeon of its own mind - is, in the end, Hell" - C.S. Lewis |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"And the ghosts of your fingers Traverse upon my curves." Soft and sensuous...beautifully penned. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 03-02-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Phantasmal embrace-- Arms molded from fibers of wind Coiling around my form... The gentle, illusory caress Casting a succession of shivers Fluttering across my skin. I allow my eyelids to fall And your luminescence to pull me Into catatonic bliss-- rendered paralyzed By the way your eyes send whispers Shooting deep into my soul. ================ such intensity girlie!!! such unique imagery and vocabulary as well. awesome writing K,... very cool use of physical imagery to show the intensity of the emotions being expressed. and hey...If Mark says it compares to your "tree" poem... it must be great... he still raves about that poem... its one of his most favs of any poet... here or "famous" ... well done sweet poetess take care jm Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Sharon- Thanks, I appreciate it! Mark- Green Velvet Queen? Is that the one you're reffering to? It must be because thats the only tree one I've written for a while...anyways, I'm glad you liked both of them, thank you so much for your support.  Maree- LOL, your muse is much more seasoned than my own, I'm afraid...I hope yours comes back soon so I can see more of your wonderful work! Thanks for reading my friend, I love hearing from you.  Elizabeth- So many things can help us in so many ways...thanks for the kind comments my friend!  Abrahm- Thank you for your kindness my dear, you know I always appreciate it.  Poeminister- Thank you!  JM- Thank you so much my friend! Your replies always bring a smile to my face. I really appreciate it.  *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Krista--You express a way to feel what the heart needs...if only we could all do this..beautiful poem! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the power of a thought. . . wonderful!!! --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I allow my eyelids to fall And your luminescence to pull me Into catatonic bliss-- rendered paralyzed By the way your eyes send whispers Shooting deep into my soul.' Absolutely amazing, Alwye! Whew...no words I can say would do this poem justice! Breathtaking work!! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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