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a place of solace |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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and if I want you more than you want me, then what my sweet? shall my wanting be enough to see us through or will you eventually wander to where your wanting is more where it is enough to match your need? and if your loving me frightens me to flight will you spread your wings and fly with me, just so I will never be alone? or shall you wait patiently for my wings to tire and for me to return to your arms? and if we found in each other only what we looked to find only what we longed for and didn't heed what was really there and the roaring fire, to not more than an ember dies shall you remain my friend and still find comfort in my hugs smile with me when I smile and offer me your shoulder when I cry? shall there still be a place of solace for you in me? |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I've always wished for happy endings like this.... I never got one........when it was over, it was over, and it turns out, I liked it that way. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is very heart warming and sweet..... here's hoping.....  SEA |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm reading and eating dinner, tired, but finding peace in poetry and this one is so wonderful. Thank you for posting this! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Within the release of love in it's freedom comes the flight of comfort and the knowledge that it will find it's way back home and cuddle up in warmth to the heart that spawned the journey to begin with. Such wonderful words you pen in this one. Now my only question is .... " Can you book a red-eye on this flight or is it prime time travel only?"  Loved the composition of this piece very much and the flow and line breaks were remarkable. Just thought you should know. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I am completely speechless. This is so...what I wish I could say. Fine! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
You've picked a great topic to write about...I love loved the imagery about the birds..that was brilliant....the content is just great....very good job! Nathan |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Lovely, don't we all need such a place. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"shall you remain my friend and still find comfort in my hugs smile with me when I smile and offer me your shoulder when I cry? shall there still be a place of solace for you in me?" Finding solace in another is a gift and it's always a risk when we want more... will we be left with nothing? Or will we find our way to the sanctum of total acceptance and unconditional love? Will you make a blonde think? *G* I love this, lady... especially the ending. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow. Mike |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I have to aplogize, I kept waiting til I felt better to thank everyone personally, but my day has deteriorated even more...so I will simply say thank you to all.....your comments and understanding mean much to me |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely wonderful, jellybeans. I loved the softness to this, the longing, the wondering if things will turn out good in the end. Great write, I'm glad I got the chance to read!  *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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