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OLIAS
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0 posted 2001-03-01 05:02 PM


Incantation

Tender tender is the tread
that winds its way to love,
Slender slender is the thread
that binds me hand in glove,
Colder colder I would be
without your gentle touch,
Older older than the sea
but knowing half as much,
Find me find me oh my love
time is short make haste,
Bind me bind me hand in glove
lifes to short to waste,
Hold me hold me gentle dove
ever to be near,
Teach me teach me oh my love
for ignorance is fear.

Olias.


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SEA
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1 posted 2001-03-01 05:38 PM


Sounds like a song.........quite beautiful SEA
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2 posted 2001-03-01 06:37 PM


Tender tender is the tread
that winds its way to love,
Slender slender is the thread
that binds me hand in glove,
Colder colder I would be
without your gentle touch,
Older older than the sea
but knowing half as much,
=============================
very cool write Olias..
love the repetative phrasing
a lovely chant of cadence kissed devotion
I like the uniqueness of this one.
way cool


sing to me sing to me in your rhyme
promises of love to stand the test of time
write me write me a sweet spell in verse
your gift of harmony in sweet poetic curse



Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

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3 posted 2001-03-01 07:43 PM


OLIAS~
Quite an enjoyable read.
Very imaginative piece.
I played a little magnetic poetry with your verse~

'Incantation

Tender slender is the tread
that winds its way to love,
Slender tender is the thread
that binds me hand in glove,
Colder older I would be
without your gentle touch,
Older colder than the sea
but knowing half as much,
Find me bind me oh my love
time is short make haste,
Bind me find me hand in glove
lifes to short to waste,
Teach me hold me gentle dove
ever to be near,
Hold me teach me oh my love
for ignorance is fear.'


Olias.

I genuinely enjoyed this.
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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OLIAS
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4 posted 2001-03-05 01:21 PM


SEA,
Thank you for your reply, a song.... thats an idea.

J.M.
Hi there, thanks for your kind words, and the verse, be well poet friend.

Marge,
I'm glad you liked this, thanks for your reply and for the alternative verse, its interesting how by moving things about you can create something different.


Regards to you all
Olias.

Paula Finn
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5 posted 2001-03-05 01:57 PM


You always touch me with your writing...thanks
Sunshine
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6 posted 2001-03-05 01:59 PM


Olias, this likes me so much it followed me right into my library....
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7 posted 2001-03-05 03:35 PM


I particularly liked this:

"Slender slender is the thread
that binds me hand in glove..."

It so happens that during esbat, a high priestess, binds herself, lest her thoughts materialize and affront The Goddess--as sabbat is not a day for self, but for worship only...

Very touching read for me, and very very astute rendering here.



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8 posted 2001-03-05 03:51 PM


just beautiful..*s
~Wynter

ethome
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9 posted 2001-03-05 03:57 PM


That's quite a magical ritual of romance you've penned there Olias...very well done my friend!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

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