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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-03-01 01:13 PM


to think the sun would
leave
and darkness would
encompass all

...and I in dark of night
to feel for the candle
and touch the unlit wick

there, in the dark
wondering if my wondering
would bring the flame to me...

knowing that
without action
without that spark
ignited
I would continue alone
in the dark

until, that is,
the come of morn
and in the first light
of your eyes…
see the flame that was there all along…


© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-03-01 01:31 PM


Karilea--the light within you is bright..candle or none...enough to light the sun!
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2 posted 2001-03-01 01:36 PM


there, in the dark
wondering if my wondering
would bring the flame to me...
=================
until, that is,
the come of morn
and in the first light
of your eyes…
see the flame that was there all along…
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very cool response to a fellow poets inspire
love the "feel" of this one....
very cool indeed


Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

Sunshine
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3 posted 2001-03-01 01:54 PM


Martie....what a lovely comment, thank you...

JM....always enjoy seeing which lines grab you....thank you!

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4 posted 2001-03-02 10:31 AM


Kari dear heart, you are the light burning in the dark, illuminating the perfect poetic lines which you write. I love this one dear heart, absolutely first class work!

Fabulous truly excellent

take care love as always
Puck




Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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