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Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

0 posted 2001-02-28 03:43 PM

How long is forever?
That, no one can know.
They say it takes forever
For one to learn and grow.
Forever is forever-
I don't know how long that will be-
But I can say forever
Is the time you spent with me.
For though it was but one moment
That was snatched out of one day
My heart will always be with you
And that is where it will stay.
That moment will last forever
And beyond infinity
It left its mark upon my soul
And always is with me.
Your life has deeply touched mine,
So although here you could not stay
With you was my forever-
Forever, for a day.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2001-02-28 03:48 PM

I feel exactly this way about Michelle...James

Jeremy Redinger
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since 2001-02-27

Posts 46

2 posted 2001-02-28 04:40 PM

Wonderful... Just wonderful... I don't like poems that rhyme, at all. They remind me of bubbly nusery rhymes of my early days, it's hard for me to think of them as serious. I read them that way, and this one is no different. But there's more than that in this, and it's made it's way past the giggly joking child that has etched itself in my mind. It takes a wonderful poem to do that. Sometimes good time does last forever, and it is extraordinary when it does. We tend to get so used to having a good time and have it over before we know it... But this is not always the case, and it is most magnifiscent when it is a time you spend with someone you truely love. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

Jeremy

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-02-28 04:47 PM

I can't agree with Jeremy here as far as the rhyming goes...I can see his point somewhat...but I am a great lover of traditional poetry and I think it still rides the crest of talent that it takes to be proficient in poetic creation...this is very well written and it expresses feelings from the heart that I feel free verse doesn't do as well....mind you, I love free verse too because it opens the avenues to new and exciting approaches to the craft....all in all I'd say it's just a matter of opinion.....and mine is, I think this is excellent!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Jeremy Redinger
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since 2001-02-27

Posts 46

4 posted 2001-02-28 04:53 PM

I agree with ethome... I meant the hinderance is mine, it's difficult for me to appriciate poetry that rhymes, and so it takes a poem that is really great to break through that for me. Of all the rhyming poetry out there that holds so much truth and meaning, very few are able to strike a chord in my heart. You have done just that.

Elizabeth

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Posts 6871
Minnesota

5 posted 2001-02-28 06:36 PM

Just wanted to take a moment to say thank you to you all! I'm really glad you liked this one....and Jeremy, welcome to Passions!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-02-28 08:07 PM

it has been said that forever is the only thing that can be measured by the heart. . .

wonderful Elizabeth. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Elizabeth

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7 posted 2001-02-28 11:07 PM

Sven~thanks so much for reading this and all my work. I really do appreciate it.

DreamLess
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since 2001-02-28

Posts 92

8 posted 2001-03-01 03:10 AM

i really loved your words
and it will keep touching my soul
for ever
so simple..
so pure
nthing more i can say

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2001-03-01 09:54 AM

tears jumped to my eyes even before I could finish this beautiful poem.......

SEA

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

10 posted 2001-03-01 10:24 AM

Sometimes a fleeting moment IS meant to be a lifetime...

well done little one...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2001-03-01 02:02 PM

But I can say forever
Is the time you spent with me.
For though it was but one moment
That was snatched out of one day
My heart will always be with you
And that is where it will stay.
That moment will last forever
And beyond infinity
It left its mark upon my soul
And always is with me.
Your life has deeply touched mine,
So although here you could not stay
With you was my forever-
Forever, for a day.
=====================

when I see your name ...
I know I will be touched and relate ...
and once again..I am and I do...
and I thank you...
beautiful sincere tribute Elizabeth

"That moment will last forever
And beyond infinity
It left its mark upon my soul"

indeed sweet poet...indeed

Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

12 posted 2001-03-01 06:57 PM

This is special.....

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

13 posted 2001-03-01 07:15 PM

You guys are all so wonderful. Thanks to everyone for all the replies to this. I am glad so many people liked this...thank you again everyone.

Just see how virtue repays you, you turn and someone betrays you
Betray him first, and the game's reversed...
-from The Scarlet Pimpernel

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

14 posted 2001-03-01 08:03 PM

Elizabeth~
This is just lovely !

'For though it was but one moment
That was snatched out of one day
My heart will always be with you
And that is where it will stay.
That moment will last forever
And beyond infinity
It left its mark upon my soul
And always is with me.'

My heart relates so much to these thoughts !
Thank you ~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

15 posted 2001-03-01 08:33 PM

Beautiful write...love the title and you did poetic justice to it. Well done.

Poeminister

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

16 posted 2001-03-02 03:16 AM

and this gem is going to my library for sure..such mature insightful thoughts

Dennis
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 235
Indiana

17 posted 2001-03-02 10:00 AM

when I'm online it's not long enough!

sure, forever....we just can't imagine it but let's add another day to it shall we?

Dennis

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

18 posted 2001-03-02 12:47 PM

Everyone, I thank you all for your replies....all of you have made me

today. You guys are all the best.

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

19 posted 2001-03-02 04:01 PM

Love the way your mind works, Elizabeth!

Corinne

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

20 posted 2001-03-02 05:34 PM

Elizabeth,
you captured the essence of eternity in this write and done it so skillfully I was swept along.
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

BSC

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since 2000-02-04

Posts 2919
New York, USA

21 posted 2001-03-05 08:59 AM

Oh so lovely Elizabeth ~ Definitely going into the library...Every single line is just wonderful!!! Bonnie

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

22 posted 2001-03-05 09:58 AM

It left its mark upon my soul
And always is with me.

that forever day is wonderful isn't it *s

treasure it always

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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