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Agust P
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0 posted 2001-02-27 01:27 PM


YOUR EYES

today
your green eyes
came with the new wind
over the seven seas
and I felt your breath in the air
and I closed my eyes
to see you
and your smiling green eyes

I listen to your voice
hush, hush
there is a sound faraway

was it the hot smile in your voice?
or was it only a breeze in my soul?



© Copyright 2001 Agust P. - All Rights Reserved
Red-uni
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1 posted 2001-02-27 01:30 PM


yes, this one I like!!!
Red

Dixie
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2 posted 2001-02-27 01:40 PM


The eyes are truely the windows to the soul..Very nice read...
Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2001-02-27 01:42 PM


I love the flow to this one...and I especially like the last two lines...Great write AP

We all have wings...some of us don't know why


Agust P
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4 posted 2001-02-27 02:56 PM


thanks to you all for your nice and positive comments! AP
Poeminister
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5 posted 2001-02-28 09:36 PM


Lovely write...soothing and mysterious. Nicely done.

Poeminister

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2001-02-28 09:40 PM


I think I am now very very happy to have...green eyes...
Voiceless
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7 posted 2001-02-28 10:06 PM


the thoughts in the last lines are beautiful..
A pleasure to read..


~*Peachy Be*~

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8 posted 2001-03-01 09:36 AM


ohhh, I like this very much SEA
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