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Forever Gone
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Forever Gone The rose is now forever gone The scent remains the whole life long And visions of a petal’s hue Abide within the depth of you The wine he poured and slowly sipped Remains on wetness of your lip A taste so sweet does not depart Embedded in a tender heart A touch of silk, a feel of soft The sense of rising up aloft To touch the clouds, to soar the sky Still dwells in reminiscent eye How well we save the little parts Of sweetness wrapped within our hearts And never count the solemn tears That fill the soul throughout the years His words are scrolled in lyric rhyme That live forever in your mind His eyes that once enchanted yours Are diamond’s gleam that still allures The rose yet blossoms in your eyes It is a flower that never dies Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 02-27-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"How well we save the little parts Of sweetness wrapped within our hearts And never count the solemn tears That fill the soul throughout the years" So lovely and flowing Liz ... and so very true. Memories have an amazing way of smoothing and softening over the years. You've crafted an incredibly lovely poem, with much wisdom within. Thank you for the beautiful read, my friend ...  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie~ A lovely thought to begin my day - I shall pause to smell the roses ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
I agree 100% with Kit.....a well crafted poem. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you for this, Lady Santos! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You have a true gift for meter, Elizabeth, this is wonderful. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A cry that floats the wind in sigh A sigh that brings a tear to eye. A lovely fragile butterfly That spreads its wings the shape of Y A lovely poem Sy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Exquisite, Elizabeth. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
liz elegant as always. this touched me more than you know! everytime you write lady...you touch this forum in such a remarkable way. this brought tears to my eyes...both happy and sad ones. i humbly thank you for posting this! take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You know how to make me think. When I read the title, I thought about the word "forever" and its meaning...and it can be both good and bad. When someone says, "I love you forever," it's something to be happy about, but forever gone isn't and you have to come to terms with it. Sorry for rambling, Liz....you've done beautifully as always. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
gone forever. . . but not forgtten. . . wonderful Liz. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
your words took me up.. and made me touch the clouds.. there's nothing can say my feeling.. i just can say ..WOW |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for your very kind responses to this poem. I appreciate each and every comment. Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--This is exquisite! |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Very sweet ..take time to smell the roses and more than that savor golden moments and like hidden treasures, never let them fade away. enjoyed!!  Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Your just so good Lis... You know how much I love my Rose... and too, she'll never be gone from my inner parts. Again you've touched my heart... much much love. dale Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am. To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight. -Marge Tindal [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful thoughts and reflections Elizabeth. "How well we save the little parts Of sweetness wrapped within our hearts And never count the solemn tears That fill the soul throughout the years. "His words are scrolled in lyric rhyme That live forever in your mind His eyes that once enchanted yours Are diamonds gleam that still allures." These types of reflections of the warmth of a loving relationship are bound to flow through your heart from time to time .....the memories being still so strong....wonderful poem my dear lady.......take care ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky sweet words...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I loved this poem |
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