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ATelamon
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0 posted 2001-02-27 02:02 AM


What difference
...can any manifest
.....hope
that Lighthouse keepers beam

a candle wick we forget to light

what difference
...the ships would impale
.....themselves on reefs
all the same lighted or not

and so I stand here wondering
should I light the candle burning
or leave all to the night

I look to my life and find
only one answer I wonder
would yours here be the same
sad sighs as I light the altar of life



"Decisions are Dominoes. Pause to reflect, before you set them in motion.



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Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
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1 posted 2001-02-28 10:41 AM


Hi ATelamon,

If im understanding this correctly, alot of people at times feel like you do, but I think if no chances are taken then to always wonder and wander, I liked this,

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



inot2B
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since 2000-09-18
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2 posted 2001-03-01 12:25 PM


Light the candle, you never know who's looking for a refuge.
doreen peri
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3 posted 2001-03-01 01:04 PM


a sad sigh echoed back.....

i appreciate your unique style of expression and could very much identify with this one.

Sunshine
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4 posted 2001-03-01 01:09 PM


...and I in dark of night
feel for the candle
and touch the unlit wick

in the dark
wondering if my wondering
would bring the flame to me...

Excellent....you are giving much in the way of inspiration today...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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5 posted 2001-03-01 01:32 PM


and so I stand here wondering
should I light the candle burning
or leave all to the night

I look to my life and find
only one answer I wonder
would yous here be the same
sad sighs as I light the altar of life
====================

excellent use of imagery, metaphor, and comparisons to enchance the emotions
very cool write here...
unique style of expression
well done.
take care
jm


Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

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