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Sweet Clarity
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Sweet Clarity |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sweet Clarity The patio is playing the music of rain across the algae green of damp, it drains in a whirlpool and starts a stream trickling through the grass, onto the cement of alley river, flowing to the gutter, the river of a city. And in warm listening I thank February for air that presses down upon the mountains and for the seeping in of thought, like the song of wet cement, a whales song, surreal and yet potent with knowing that a drop of rain is like seconds falling into time. In each down sky there is a beginning waiting in the cold for spring, even as the doorway’s droop of body clasping itself is somehow lulled by the music that comes through the drain pipe and explodes beyond his soggy wish. The children burst forth from the fold, their jumping feet alive with possibility, and in their dash for opening doors the laughter of a splash echoes and wakes the heart that February has taken, wakes it and shakes it and hangs it on this feeling, where I can smell the sweet clarity of the first of spring. |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"that a drop of rain is like seconds falling into time." I like this very much!  SEA |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I like this one a lot. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a breath of Spring, Martie!! Lovely. Hope is born anew! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, A tender heart warming write. Well done. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, This is very nice. Your poetry only gets better, my friend. Michael |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Martie,...thank you. For this, for taking me. *Peace. |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
i enjoyed this very much loved your descriptions it'll be here before ya know it |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
sweet thoughts of spring... soon the flowers will be in full bloom here in Kansas, but they already are in California... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Once more the breath of spring comes through Martie and the creative juices flow from the poets from the stream of human connection. This is a beautiful way to express yourself! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Beautifully penned. Enjoyed this read very much. Poeminister |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--I'm so glad you liked it...thanks. Elizabeth--thank you too for liking my poem. Denise--Hope...yes, you're right! Sy--thank you for your sweet reply. Michael--What a nice thing to say...thank you, my friend. Spitfire...you are a great companion. NC--I always anticipate...makes the going so much more fun. Mike--Not in the yard...but they sure are in the flower shop...thanks. Poeminister--I'm so glad that you enjoyed this...thank you for letting me know. |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
hi, I enjoyed your poem...hope to read more. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Martie no one can make it sound quite the way you do. Never has rain sounded this good through my eyes. (if eyes could hear) LOL It's been raining here as well, guess I'll just look at differently now. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, and you've shared the beauty with me. Thanks! |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
hi, I enjoyed your poem...hope to read more. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
What a good read for a rainy night. I'm listening to some of those sounds this very moment. "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
only you can make the mundane scenes of rain and algae come forth in beauty and hopefulness - = There's not a single Martie poem I don't save and treasure |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow martie, this takes my heart and shakes it and says, "don't you know that spring is out there? wake up and enjoy!"...stunningly beautiful writing |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie...you made me want to get my galoshes out of the memory closet, slip them all, and go splashing! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is so absolutely lovely, if their is any perfection on this earth, it is in this piece, Martie. I enjoyed it terribly much and would so Like a copy for my favorites file. May I? I could give no critique more than I wish it were mine. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Red-uni--Thank you so much...I hope you will read more. Rebecca--I thought ears could hear...I know they can...if you look hard enough...thanks for such a wonderful reply! Mike--and they say it never rains in California...the sound is so sweet, isn't it. Bill--Thank you for the treasure of your words...you make me glad to write. jellybeans--I'm so glad that you enjoyed my poem...thank you so much for such a nice reply! Karilea--what are your goloshas doing in your memory closet...doesn't it rain in Kansas? Vas--It is a great compliment that you have given, to want to put this poem in your files...of course you can...thank you. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, wonderful write.... And in warm listening I thank February for air that presses down upon the mountains and for the seeping in of thought, like the song of wet cement....., these lines among others were just fabulous. Parker |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Martie~ So lovely ... and it does feel as though Spring is here ! The air is heavy-laden with fragrance from the orange blossom ... Spring is in the air ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now cowboy is missing the southern part of CA really bad thanks to you. I almost forgot how beautiful it is there when days such as this kiss the horizon but you bring the memories back so vividly I almost can smell the rain kicking up the dust out there. Wonderful write my friend. So beautiful are your images and words in this masterpiece. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
A great poem... It makes me wish that in Minnesota you get rain instead of snow in Febuary! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sweetly kissed with hope and full of possibilities... and a wonderful reminder that the bleak of winter's darkness doesn't last forever. This is beautiful, Martie! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You write what I feel This one should be published So exquisite is all of your writing Liz |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Parker--You don't stop by often enough...I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem! Marge--I know what you mean about the orange blossoms...wonderful isn't it! Mark--I'm always glad to bring back a memory or two...I know someday you will be back for a visit..I'll be waiting with a hug! Voiceless--I would love a little snow. suthern--that's exactly right, my friend...spring comes and goes inside and out. Liz--If I write what you feel...then I'm very pleased...thanks for letting me know. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
now THIS...is what I'm talkin' 'bout!  love you my marite...grin |
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