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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2001-02-24 06:49 PM


I see things dying in the rain –-
the flower trying to hold itself
from crumbling to petals;
soaked to shine,
the bird with the broken wing
underneath the tree’s shadow.

Rain is the sound of covered ghosts,
the condensed windowpane view
of a muddy, pooled, flooded place.
The ripples are sine waves
needing clarification.
If you could hear them, they’d say
“don’t get soaked!”

The world seems so solemn and alone
when you’re with people in the market,
trying to cover a stormhole;
or, conversely, with a hot mug and a song
to nurse the warm wound in your heart from
the cold.


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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2001-02-24 07:08 PM


Mike~ I'm with you in the rain today...........a bit further north, but in the rain nonetheless......wonderful poem! SEA
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2 posted 2001-02-24 07:55 PM


Hi Mike,

I loved the imagery in this piece, the circular movement of the pools speaking out to one "lonely" in the middle of "everyone" yet no one, may the music play friendly sounds,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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Under the stars upon the wind
3 posted 2001-02-24 08:39 PM


I like it...


~*Peachy Be*~

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4 posted 2001-02-24 09:06 PM


Love the flow of this, Nice work.

~FKA Maria Byrne~


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5 posted 2001-02-24 10:22 PM


The rain taketh, but remember the sun will bring it back.
I've never felt more alone, than in a room full of people.
I always admit when reading your poetry I don't always get your drift. Yet you always make me think.

bsquirrel
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6 posted 2001-02-25 05:19 PM


Hey, everyone. Thanks for reading and for enjoying. And I realize my poetry can be difficult, but no apologizes. I feel honored that my words can make people think about things they might not otherwise. And I'm glad to share.

Mike

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