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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2001-02-23 07:32 PM




She catches her breath
when through the line
she hears
your voice
amorously
calling her name

breathlessly
waiting in anticipation
she spins
falling
into the depths
of your beckoning

she sighs in disbelief
"the Intensity
the chemistry"
she becomes fire
licking your air
suddenly alive
glowing
and burning for you
desiring to crawl
beneath the lining
of your skin

Dark Angel
24/2/01


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wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)
1 posted 2001-02-23 07:34 PM


HELLO is there anybody out there.... Get on msn girlie I miss you!! Now to read the poem
wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)
2 posted 2001-02-23 07:39 PM


absolutley what to expect from a goose pimply DA poem yuh
Severn
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3 posted 2001-02-23 07:40 PM


Sheesh.

Where did THIS come from?
Get back on MSN and TALK....

I will be waiting madam.

Hugs

K



...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment...


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 02-23-2001).]

snowpants
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KS
4 posted 2001-02-23 07:40 PM


'breathlessly
waiting in anticipation
she spins
falling
into the depths
of your beckoning'

Excellent writing, DA! Such intensity...I love it!!

sp


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

Severn
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5 posted 2001-02-23 07:43 PM


Oh and might I add Roo - I think this is shivery too. Guess I should tell you what I THINK of the poem heh. (Too sick to feel like critiquing - otherwise you know I would - so don't think I won't remember this is here...)

Love Tigs

K


...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment...

JLR
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6 posted 2001-02-23 07:45 PM


Desiring to crawl beneath the lining of your skin. Great line. Great poem.
Martie
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7 posted 2001-02-23 08:23 PM


Maree--A wonderful description of the falling in love feeling. Especially liked the following:

"she becomes fire
licking your air
suddenly alive
glowing
and burning for you
desiring to crawl
beneath the lining
of your skin"

I miss you! Hugs!

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2001-02-23 08:23 PM


Maree-

wow...this poem...is so lovely and beautiful! Excellent writing that leaves
your readers completely entranced. Must take some pretty awesome inspiration
to make one write such as this. Just beautiful...really...leaves me breathless.

Take care hon.
~amy~

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


Jamie
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Blue Heaven
9 posted 2001-02-23 10:02 PM


As usual, a very lovely poem Maree--- seems to me you are exploring new horizons...... Wonderful hon-----

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Janet Marie
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10 posted 2001-02-23 10:10 PM


she sighs in disbelief
"the Intensity
the chemistry"
she becomes fire
licking your air
suddenly alive
glowing
and burning for you
desiring to crawl
beneath the lining
of your skin
===================

Intense is right ...
very cool write DA ...
sensual and captivating.
had to remember to exhale after reading *S*
well done poetess of heat

Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
11 posted 2001-02-23 10:21 PM


As your poem says...."she catches her breath" as she reads this...excellent Maree.
Dark Angel
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Posts 10095

12 posted 2001-02-24 10:25 AM


Thank you al lso very much for your lovely replies and fortaking the time to stop by and read

I miss you too Martie

Hugs all

Maree

Marsha
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13 posted 2001-02-25 10:58 AM


DA love, this is outstanding writing, full of heat, full of fire. And quite breathtaking, absolutely excellant work from you.
Take care love as always
Mushy


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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