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Twins -- conceived with the cowboy
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Twins -- conceived with the cowboy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I Don't ... (version #1) ~*~ I don't think you know how much I needed you With my words of caring came something new I don't believe you saw desperation in my eyes My desperation for a love in lonely night cries I don’t think you know how many tears slid down Behind the smiling mask covering my frown I don’t believe you heard the wistfulness in my voice As I silently prayed I would be someone’s choice. I don't think you felt the breeze of silent caress Sent to you in the hours of midnight duress I don't believe you tasted the salt in my tears Within the dreams of kisses hiding my fears I don't think you smelled the flowers' sweet perfume In bouquets bought daily to color my room. I don't believe you heard the promise barely uttered Hope cried out a window that must stay shuttered. I don't feel as if you ever truly found the way To see the beauty of two hearts at play I don't believe you know what it is I have felt As once again, memories begin to melt I don't feel as though we ever stood a chance For you've left no time in your life for romance I don't believe you noticed or were ever touched As I humbly tried to offer you so much. Ruth Gill Mark Bohannan ~~~~~~~*~~~~~~~ I Don't ... (version #2) ~*~ I don't think you know how much I needed you With my words of caring came something new I don't believe you saw desperation in my eyes My desperation for a love in lonely night cries From the depths of my dreams, I heard a faint pleading That beckoned to me - Was a lonely heart needing The caring I’ve hidden and always denied? I wake to silence, feel dissatisfied. In the cries of howling winds and clouded nights You turned from silent whispers of my plights Harboring this heart given over to only you Shattering memories as you sent them askew Faltering footsteps find their way to a strange place And my longing eyes gaze at last on the one face I feel I belong with - But can I believe? I fear the answer and hardly dare breathe. With one big gasp and eyes closed in fear I walk towards you - drying a lonely tear With a trust in us and a hope in my dream I take your hand and damn sorrow's stream Your touch gives the key that frees an imprisoned heart A plea bursts from me that we'll never be apart I don't think you know how much I needed you I'll spend my life making sure that you do. Ruth Gill Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Oh you two........tears to my eyes.......I know both of these........at different times in my life of course.......phenonenal.....love this........I'm at a loss, I just don't think I can tell you how wonderful this is to me..........as I'm sure it will be to everyone else.....  SEA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - a story you certainly tell with this writing. Sad, but still their are two hearts a beating. Wish you the best. BC |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marvelous!!! This is wonderful...you write well together! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal & MarkB~ It doesn't surprise me at all that two of the loveliest people it's been my pleasure to read - would team up and write such a perfect piece. *Hugs* to both of you ... and congratulations on the birth of twins ! ! I know it was a labor of love ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don't think you know how much I needed you With my words of caring came something new I don't believe you saw desperation in my eyes My desperation for a love in lonely night cries I don’t think you know how many tears slid down Behind the smiling mask covering my frown I don’t believe you heard the wistfulness in my voice As I silently prayed I would be someone’s choice. ======================== I don't feel as if you ever truly found the way To see the beauty of two hearts at play I don't believe you know what it is I have felt As once again, memories begin to melt I don't feel as though we ever stood a chance For you've left no time in your life for romance I don't believe you noticed or were ever touched As I humbly tried to offer you so much. ================ I don't think you know how much I needed you With my words of caring came something new I don't believe you saw desperation in my eyes My desperation for a love in lonely night cries From the depths of my dreams, I heard a faint pleading That beckoned to me - Was a lonely heart needing The caring I’ve hidden and always denied? I wake to silence, feel dissatisfied. ================ With one big gasp and eyes closed in fear I walk towards you - drying a lonely tear With a trust in us and a hope in my dream I take your hand and damn sorrow's stream Your touch gives the key that frees an imprisoned heart A plea bursts from me that we'll never be apart I don't think you know how much I needed you I'll spend my life making sure that you do. ================ emotional and expressive melding of two poets who write with very similar styles and who obviously inspired each other to new heights. These two bittersweet pieces offer both perspectives of love lost and love rediscovered. I related to the emotions in these more than I have words for ... excellent writing you two ... you harmonize with rhyme divine ... I hope you'll do more conceiving   *L*"I don't think you know how much I needed you With my words of caring came something new" I think that sums it all up poetically & perfectly great write cowboy MC and Ruth-girlie Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow--with such heart strength, comes perfect emotionally coupled writing...You are both so dear to me...and this poetry says why. Wonderful writing!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Doggonit, suthern!!! Didn't I warn you about conceiving with cowboys!!  Well, the offspring in awesome! Good work, you two |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Suthern and Mark, the conception was immaculate, the delivery divine. write on at random or tandem Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hey can I ditto balladeer......these are awesome.....I know version one, wonder it I will ever get to know version two... really really nice work here you two...love them both |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
SEA: Your tears are the greatest compliment imaginable. *S* Thank you very much! Bill: Thank you... those wishes are reciprocated, kind sir. *S* PDV: Thank you so much! *S* Your "marvelous" is greatly appreciated! Marge: ROFL... The poems were easy... the only "labor" involved was determining which parent would make the announcement. *G* Thank you! Janet Marie: Thank you ma'am isn't nearly adequate... but thank you just the same! *S* Considering how much I enjoy Mark's work, I'm immensely flattered you find our styles similar. *S* Martie: Thank you, kind lady... You're pretty dear yourself... and your words mean much to us! *S* Balladeer: Why, no... (innocent look)... I don't recall any such warning! LOL. Thank you! *S* Kethry: "Random" pretty much describes my writing usually... but I sure did enjoy this "tandem." *S* Thank you! jellybeans: I sincerely hope you come to know version 2 well, dear friend... thank you very much! And Mark... I don't have the words to thank you for such an incredible experience. For every NOPE I gave you, there's a whole host of corresponding THANK YOUs owed to you for not listening... *S* I enjoyed every word, cowboy! And now, git yoreself in here and take the credit you richly deserve for these poems so dear to my heart... for they wouldn't have existed without your insistence. *S* (BTW... Since it will probably be Monday before I can post again, you're on diaper duty again! LOL) [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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zoe Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 34 |
sybil is rofg@diaper duty......and me too...am out of here for the weekend |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Both versions unbelievable! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I always you have to try everything twice! This is a delightful and beautiful Gemini poem....love to you both for such a gracious read! And suthern? I just bet B'deer does not find the idea of "twins" inconceivable ROFL...oh wicked me...  " Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go." T.S. Eliot |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Awsome write, my congratulations to you both, lets have more ! Regards, Olias. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Very beautiful, guys...absolutely loved 'em!! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
SEA-your tears and your words are a gift of beauty themselves and I too thank you for sharing how much you relate to these two. Thanks much my friend. Bill-Yeppers, she can telll 'em good can't she!! Thank you sir.PdV-Thank you and that means alot coming from someone of your poetic caliber. Marge-I went from adorable to lovely????? Now how did that happen?? LOL Thanks sweetie, she made it easy. You should have seen all the looks on her face as she cruched up trying to squeeze these lines out!!!!!  LOL JM-hey there girlie girl........where the heck is the double stick tape on these cloth diapers????????? I don't get it??? Thanks so much sweetie and I know when you say you don't have words it is only because you find and relate and dive into the reads you give and really pour into the emotions of a poem. You always do and that is what makes you special and alot of these words could and do talk of how cowboy sees you ....... ya know that???? Of course you do. Thanks puddlepuff. Now can you hurry over here and show me how to get the cow to fill these bottles???? Martie-Thank you so much my special friend and fellow admirer of suthern's work. Your words mean the world to me as I know they do her. Hugs!!! Balladeer-SSSHHHHHHHHHHHHHH darn it....hey, it took alot of coaxing to convince her it was purely in the interest of poetic art. Dang don't spoil it my friend!!! Thank you sir. As I said, she made it easy to write and of course she makes them look mighty good with her words in them don't ya think?Kethry-Don't tell Balladeer that the conception was emaculate. I kinda like him thinkin' that it came about from alot of close contact. LOL Thank you much my friend. You honor us greatly. jellybeans-Thanks there oh colorful one with a thousand voices!!!!! You may ditto the whomever you wish as long as you come with a smile that big. Thank you again very much.zoe-Laugh all you want........your time is coming sooner than you think with the diapers and all. LOL Voiceless-oh, believe them. Thank you for those wonderful words.serenity-Thank you from the bottom of my heart there my friend. Now do you think that Balladeer would admit it? I am glad you liked the twins and they do wink when we say your name ya know. OLIAS-MORE?????????????? Who is gonna support all of 'em if there is more? Thank you much. I am happy you enjoyed them.snowpants-Hey there my friend. SO nice to see you. Thank you for those wonderful words ... now if you can help with the burpiing of these two then maybe you and I can sit a watch the game later on. I hear that the "Mets" might have learned how to use their bats this year. ROFL. suthern-Well, MOM of poetic spit-up!!! How can I say thank you for allowing me this wonderful honor of writing with you. As you can see, you are one of the premier poets around here and everyone seems to know it but you so WAKE UP my dear and get to writing. It has been nothing but a pleasure and a great honor and I do thank you from the bottom of my heart. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Two peas in a pod sprouting beautiful poetry. Love the duet side of you both.  Deb |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Deb-Thank you so much. She does make the poetry wonderful doesn't she? I am sure she will thank you as soon as she can but I wanted to do so myself as well. I am glad you enjoyed the duet my friend. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yee-haw....Head up...move'um out......nice poem...sad...and does make me think..... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Well now... Twins are always so very special, and in the Passion family, these two little gems outshine the rest!!! Wonderful combination of pure talent and pure heart....  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is so deeply inspired and beautiful! What a pleasent creation from the pen of two fine poets....this has a very ballad type of musical ring to it....loved the wonderful flow.........ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I love this stuff...*sappy sigh* "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ruth and Mark You spurn the flow of poetic juices, you make tears flow behind a mask of contentment, you tear at heartstrings not yet plucked, you inspire a poet, a lover , a reader, a friend. Thank you for this wonderful and inspiring addition to our libraries Liz |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Toerag-With a Yee-haw in the mix of the reply we definitely have to thank ya kindly sir, but sad??? Where, when, someone has them gigglin!!! Sunnyone-Why thank you sis. I know these twins mother will be quite happy that you stopped by to read and you already know I always love to see your face smiling back at me so all that is left is thank you very much for you kind and wonderful words. ethome-Well, if anyone could hear music behind the screaming of two twins then it would have to be you and I thank you so much kind sir. You are a way cool cat!!! Saxoness-Thank you for the *sappy sigh* and I am glad you loved them. Liz-WOW.......thank you for all that for sure. It is hard to believe that our twins did all that but I am so very glad that they did and I thank you very much for sharing your enjoyment of these with us. Suthern-Okay *MOM*, your up for changing the dirty diapers again. Cowboy has to go and rustle up the varmits on the range again. Be kind, be gentle, and don't forget to burp 'em!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
zoe: You jes g'head and giggle... Honorary aunts can be stuck babysitting, yanno! LOL Voiceless: Thank you very much!!! serenity: ROFL - see what indecisiveness will do? LOL. Thank you, wicked one. *G* I'm glad you liked! Olias: More? *G* Already? LOL. He's barely caught his breath from talking me into this collaboration! LOL. (But I'm sure glad he succeeded. *G*) Thank you! snowpants: Thank you very much! *S* Blooming Rose: I'm so glad you enjoyed... thank you! *S* Toerag: Oh, my gosh! I'm sorry!!! We didn't mean to make ya think like that! Was it very painful? LOL Thank ya, sweets!!! Sunnyone: He's got the talent and the heart... I contributed a whole bunch of NOPEs! LOL Thank you... I think they're special, too. *S* ethome: If I can stop ROFL at dear ole Dad's complaints about the screaming, I'll thank you very much for those kind words... they're greatly appreciated! *S* Saxoness: Thank you! *S* I loved your reply! *S* Elizabeth Santos: Dear lady, it was an incredible pleasure to write with Mark... he made it effortless. *S* But even if it had been a horrid chore, your reply would have made it all worthwhile. *S* Thank you! Mark: Mosey on and do whatcha gotta do, cowboy... I'll take care of the babes for a while. *G* After all, I plan on giving the really nasty diaper changes to Aunt Zoe... so I can just sit and smile. LOL. Poetic spit-up? Oh, geesh... ROFLMAO Where's that burp cloth? LOL |
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zoe Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 34 |
lolol@aunt zoe....ok......no prob...I will take the nasty ones......really......*nods her head as sincerly as she knows how* I am not worrying a bit...these two are such dolls there won't be a nasty one to clean...rofg...this will be the easiest diaper duty ever!!!!! no really congrats you 2, these are even better reading the second time |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
My two favorite stanzas: Faltering footsteps find their way to a strange place And my longing eyes gaze at last on the one face I feel I belong with - But can I believe? I fear the answer and hardly dare breathe. With one big gasp and eyes closed in fear I walk towards you - drying a lonely tear With a trust in us and a hope in my dream I take your hand and damn sorrow's stream |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
VAS: Those are favorites of mine, too! Thank you so much! And Aunt zoe... thanks for that second read... and babysitting! *S* |
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