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Aimster
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0 posted 2001-02-22 05:27 PM


"Blue Tempation"

Sitting here as ocean breezes float through my window--
Thoughts of you drift lazily through my mind
Time stands still--as I think over the depth of what we share
Sun setting low as she winks at me through the hues of blue sky

Fantasy is what I want to label this
Chalking it up to the fact that it's the mystery
Though I know it's more than that
Feeling the connection overtake me--I surrender

The beauty of you washing over me
As rain washes over the Earth restoring it
Heavens parting allowing rays of sunbeam
To reach my delicate heart

What ifs linger all around us
Temptation softly sleeping around the corner
And we know--
Yes we know She may wake up at any moment

Though I've never touched you
Late at night, sometimes I feel your skin
Pressing against mine
As our hearts beat in unison to music only we can hear

I sit here wondering
Do you feel what I feel--
Or is just a fantasy, that only exists for me
Then I realize, no it's not...its temptation
Like the stars tempt poets to fall in love



"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


© Copyright 2001 Amy Kennedy - All Rights Reserved
Celeste
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1 posted 2001-02-22 05:30 PM


EXCELLENT FREE VERSE! I applaud!!!!!!!! Gentle and thoughtful. I loved it!

"The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new.

Socrates

Marsha
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2 posted 2001-02-22 05:32 PM


Amy dear heart absolutely beautiful always you write so wonderfully well, into my library with this it is an absolute gem. And yes it truly is wonderful, there is always some sunshine after the rain.
Take care love as always
Mushy


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



snowpants
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3 posted 2001-02-22 06:07 PM


'I sit here wondering
Do you feel what I feel--
Or is just a fantasy, that only exists for me
Then I realize, no it's not...its temptation
Like the stars tempt poets to fall in love'

Aims, Aims, Aims...whew...this is great! These are my favorite lines, but the whole poem is fantastic! Excellent free verse, m'friend!! (ocean breezes...hmph...as I stare out the window to a BLIZZARD )

-e ~~~~~~~~


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

SEA
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4 posted 2001-02-22 06:15 PM


I think this is so much more than a mere try...........
this is WONDERFUL!!

SEA

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2001-02-22 08:20 PM


Aimster - if this was just a try, I'm waiting to see what comes out of your pen when you try one for real. Very nice.

BC

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