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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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they didn't even give themselves time to mourn isn't that what you're supposed to do? when you lose a love, isn't that what's supposed to happen? aren't there stages to all of this? you're not allowed to find a new love until the old one is gone but suppose the old one never leaves? memories can be a powerful thing you know their hold on a heart can be great sometimes, they're with you your whole life they're in every song, in every sky, in every shadow so we have to have a new love to help us forget the old one to help us move on with our lives I did love you though. . . did you?? yes. . . I would have believed it, had I not been replaced so quickly ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Let me be one of the first to say...Amen! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
but suppose the old one never leaves....Trully a sad line. Memories are imprinted in us forever.But,thank God, memories can be replaced. Beautiful poem. A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Whoa....rough one here Sven, but unfortuned, very true. You've penned this one so eloquently, when you could've simply lashed out. I think I'll save this one for later. Alicat |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I promise that you will always be one of my favorite poets. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
I did love you though.......did you? enough said!!! helen [This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 02-21-2001).] |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Oh ouch........*gentle smile* Nice job with this Sven! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
*sigh* like one typeface can replace another in the entire design of things ... like it doesn't matter of it's serif or sans serif or....... *sigh*... yeah.... well? ... if it makes you feel better, i still set my own type and nobody can tell me to use more than two fonts in any document because... 2's company, and 3 is defintely a crowd....... i loved your poem... thank you for sharing.... i hope my response made some kind of sense.... [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 02-21-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*sighs* Oh, this just broke my heart  You express this so well with such acceptance, yet sadness, I am truly sorry (you know that I know). Here's a big angel hug for you! If ever you need anything, don't hesitate to email me  Take care, Melissa~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Good evening, Sven. Your poem presents your reader, I believe, with some potent questioning, and of course I like that. Having written extensively toward the theme of love and loss and grief, I find myself captivated by your portrayal. It is a theme dear to my own bruised and basted heart. Thank you for this, tonight. Be well. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
There is a familiar sound to this Sven...unfortunately we can't measure our rate of healing to others...nor can we judge others by how WE want them to feel...no matter how strongly we feel it, I of course am speaking from my own expierence and can't make judgement nor comment on yours nor do I pretend to know where your poem comes from...just sharing the thoughts it evoked in me...as poetry often does...take care and hope you find the happiness you search for and deserve~ "I wish the real world would just stop Hasseling me!" Real World MB20 |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 Geesh..This is just pure heartwrenching, and whoever said something above about acceptance being in the mood...well..that makes it even more sad. LOL! On the good side, you have written something once again that totally wraps me up in whats going on. Nice writing, and take care of you!  *Jenn* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
a very indepth piece here.......in fact, it's downright inspiring to me. [This message has been edited by Kathleen (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you just touched my heart, how I can relate on these words... I am in awe. thanks for sharing and will save these one in my library. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I have always held that a divorce is very similar to a little death.... well done.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
JLR, thank you. . . walker, I don't know that memories can really be replaced, but we can move them aside for new ones. . .thank you. . . Ali, I know. . . I could have lashed out here. . . but why? It wouldn't change anything. . . thank you my friend. . . inot2B, and I promise that you will always be one of my friends. . . thank you for reading. . . helen, indeed. . . thank you. . . dreamkeeper, not too much of an ouch. . . thank you. . . doreen, your response made perfect sense. . . and you're welcome my friend. . . Melissa, I know. . . it's just the way it is. . . thank you for everything. . . Claire, I know that you as well know of what I'm speaking of here. . . and I thank you for your words. . . be well. . . Holly, indeed we can't tell others how to heal. . . it's not a race. . . some heal faster than others. . . but you wonder what feelings they have (or had) that they could change so quickly. . . but again, all we can do is accept and move on. . . thank you for reading. . . take care. . . Temptress, sometimes, you just have to accept, like I said earlier. . . of course, it doesn't make it easier, but. . . thank you for reading. . . Kathleen, thank you. . . glad that you can see a lot here. . . and I'm glad that it inspired you. . . Charisma, thank you my friend, but I am sorry that you can relate. . . Lady in White, sometimes, we have to suffer that death. . . but this isn't about that death. . .thank you for reading. . . -------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
well, as a man (boy do I feel like one on here) all I can say to this poem, is as long as a lady is happy, they should be, every last one of them..... oh, I know, I know, believe me don't know you personally, and maybe this is make-believe, but a lady deserves to be treated like royalty! Queen for every day....... Dennis |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven, This is so sad, so beautiful. But remember, there are always new memories to make, in the road that lay up ahead.... Love, Elise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Dennis, I agree with you. . . but how are we to feel?? Thanks for reading. . . Elise, thank you. . . I know. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sven I know that with acceptance comes the strength to go on... a gentle reminder that we have control over no other feelings, desires, and emotions but our own... When we choose to love it never guarantee's the object of our love will respond in kind.. They are always free to go... Isn't that one of the beauties of love? And at some point we let go.. Isn't that the sorrow of love? And finally they replace us and we replace them... Your words are wise and gentle... James |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
That is true... ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
AD dear heart, this is utterly truly Awesome how wonderful that you can write this, a sure and certain testament to the wonder of your soul. This is absolutely wonderful Take care as always love Bubbles Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi John, this is so touching, and the feelings so clear. Great poem. Take care. Sandra |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
A wonderful thought provoking sad poem. 'I did love you though. . . did you?? yes. . . I would have believed it, had I not been replaced so quickly' Thanks Jon |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
James, I knew that you would understand. . . the beauty and the sorrow of love. . . again, you're reading my mind. . .thank you. . . Voiceless, thank you my friend. . . Bubbles, thank you so much. . . but it's not just my soul. . . it's others as well. . . Sandra, thanks. . . glad that you could feel what I've been talking about here. . . Jon, thank you. . . yes, there are a lot of thoughts here. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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