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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2001-02-21 12:59 PM


swim, little fishy.
the murk beauty green sky water.
skyscrapers with lighted eyes with people inside.
it's so soothing to watch them work.
swim, little boy.

music behind the glass.
dislodged plants float to the clouds.
god keeps them on a shelf or something.
i cried when i lost my virginity; i
cried again when i found it.

swim carefully, little fishy.
swim like a man to the light
blurbing bubbly through the water.
just don't touch, don't touch
what you want so much to have.


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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-02-21 03:36 AM


music behind the glass.
dislodged plants float to the clouds.
god keeps them on a shelf or something.
i cried when i lost my virginity; i
cried again when i found it.

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What a cool write. I love the way you took this seemingly simple little part of our lives and brought us to the realization that things are not always as golden as they seem. Excellent writing. I very much enjoyed.

Agust P
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2 posted 2001-02-21 11:44 AM


I agree with Mark, this is good! AP
bsquirrel
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3 posted 2001-02-22 05:02 PM


Thanks.
ethome
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4 posted 2001-03-23 03:31 AM


"music behind the glass.
dislodged plants float to the clouds.
god keeps them on a shelf or something.
i cried when i lost my virginity; i
cried again when i found it.

swim carefully, little fishy.
swim like a man to the light
blurbing bubbly through the water.
just don't touch, don't touch
what you want so much to have."

I just love it Mike and I agree with Mark!

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