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The Inferno Within
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The Inferno Within |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois 
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As you're striking out in anger? One look into the inferno Raging in your eyes As your teeth clench together You become someone unknown There is a deadness an arctic set within the features of your face As you seem oblivious to everything but your anger and whom it's focused upon. We have paid the price taken the toll of blows. Though bruises heal the rest sits like glue in the mind that never deteriorates. We've paid a high price Paid with our minds Paid with our bodies Paid with our lives You can sit feeling justice wasn't done The price you pay is as a leaf blown in the wind How is it unjustified When you pay with time and money And we pay with ourselves- Our lives. How can you complain the price you pay is too high? The restitution you pay does it mend the tattered shirt Fix the broken heart Can it replenish the spirit that was slowly wrung dry Does it bring healing to broken bones or cover the multi colored bruising or hide the scars of battle left behind The hardest price you pay The biggest blow you get Is to your EGO when you stand in front of the judge and say: "guilty" <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is heartbreaking, Dovey... so many truths written into lines that simply sear as they share the fear and scars. Well done! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
It's so sad that so many families face violence each day. Sad, but truthful poem. Well done. |
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WhiteKnight Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 83NY |
A good friend of mine has been going through something similar to your poem, this simply reminds me how lucky I really am. Well done. WhiteKnight |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent description of anger. Sadly, too many people succumb to it nowadays. |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
an ugly truth given voice and you've done an excellent job well stated |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thank ya Ruth! I'm glad it came across. Hugs Walker it is sad that anyone has to face violence in their life. Thank you for reading! WK I'm really sorry to hear that. If you're friend is going through something violent I hope they can get out, or get help. Thanks! Thank you Sharon. It is sad how many are affected by it. Even sadder that many cannot control their anger. Thank you much NC! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Rebecca. Nobody should have to live under such conditions. Help is there for those who need it, more so than ever before. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
The same bitter medicine is much easier administered and forgotten than when swallowed. It's so sad for both. Learning constructive problem solving is usually blocked by heightened anger, then guilt adds fuel to the fire. Nice poem. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Sad, but well done |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is an excellent poem, dovey, straight from the heart. Hopefully the right eyes will read it..... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thanks Denise. The help is out there if they'll get it. Too many are in fear. Thanks Mom! Thank you Voiceless, it is sad. Deer thanks! Great compliment coming from you. I too hope the right eyes see it.  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"There is a deadness an arctic set within the features of your face" Rebecca, very powerful writing in this important poem. Thanks for it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
WhtDove - what an excellant writing about anger, and so true. One must live it though, I believe, to feel it. BC |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Dove~ this is really powerful and well written, my friend.....very well written  SEA |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thank you Claire for taking the time to read. Bill unfortunately I have lived it. Thank you Susan very much. ~Hugs~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Angel, this is sad and very deep. like it alot hon great writing Maree |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thank you Angel. It is very sad, and for the millions who endure it as well.  |
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