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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-02-20 07:39 AM



A special thank you to Kathleen for her help in editing this. I appreciate it.


The sun burns my skin
As we sit together on the sand
We speak of tomorrow
As you take hold of my hand

I am captured in your eyes
They are wild as the ocean
While I am with you
The world is slow motion

I can hardly believe
We are talking like this
Who knew that my life
Could respond to such bliss

Your voice is so soothing
A symphony to my ear
I sing with every word
As you draw me near

In your arms
I know I belong
Your music completes
Love’s sweet song

I hear it softly
Floating on the air
Letting me know
You’ll always be there





Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2001-02-20 07:54 AM


Lone Wolf,
S'Wonderful, Kathleen edited or not. You have done a good job with this.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-02-20 10:15 AM


I told you not to say that, YOU wrote it, and it's great!!!!!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2001-02-20 10:27 AM


This is very romantic...and I think Katleen should be happy that she helped you write such a wonderfully magic piece....keep it up!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Sunshine
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4 posted 2001-02-20 10:39 AM


It's a very special feeling when one poet helps another poet put things together "just right"...as is this!


Sven
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5 posted 2001-02-20 07:34 PM


Indeed, Kathleen should be thanked for helping you with this. . .

excellent words. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
6 posted 2001-02-20 08:56 PM



And a wonderful love song it is! Well expressed!~

Take care,
Melissa~

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2001-02-21 07:07 AM


Kethry . . . Thank you, just feeling good about life lately.

Kathleen . . . I know I wrote it, but you made it a little better. My feelings are clearer now.

ethome . . . Thanks, I am feeling more romantic these days my friend.

Sunshine . . . Oh yes it is. Well, it was put together just needed some fine tuning is all.

Sven . . . I did thank her although as she said, they are my feelings. Thanks.

Melissa . . . Thank you!! It's about time we write some love songs I think!!


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

[This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 02-23-2001).]

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