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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-02-19 09:58 PM



Linger a Little More

Shadows be my beckoning call
through a door, down misty hall
beseech me to look o'er wall,

But looking o'er I cannot bear,
though voices faded do I hear
sounding close and full of cheer,

For beyond impenetrable wall
I would heed the shadowy call
to see the faces, loved voices all.

Would I, had I but known
though life's forces shown
through yon past's door,

I would not have flown
so high, so long gone,
but have lingered a little more.

Age be wise to one still fair,
knowing now how much I dare
to revisit the past, 'tisn't fair…

To not be able to once again hold
the people that were true gold
for they are now gone beyond old.

Heart be broken o'er words unsaid
yet they fill this empty head
some days, I would be lead…

Would I, had I but known
though life's forces shown
through yon past's door,

I would not have flown
so high, so long gone,
but have lingered a little more.

©KRJ
23 January 2000



© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Lone Wolf
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1 posted 2001-02-19 10:09 PM


Wonderful and emotional writing here, Sunshine. If only we knew, we could have said something to them. Just have to have faith that they knew how we felt. This is an important lesson I think. Thank you for sharing.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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2 posted 2001-02-19 10:27 PM


I like this one, Sunshine. I ended a poem once with the lines:

...but another that is just as bad
Is the simple phrase "I wish I had".

Sadly, we all have those things in our pasts..hopefully we learn from them.


Voiceless
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3 posted 2001-02-19 10:39 PM


It is times like these that
the words that we use to weave thoughts
leave us with none to use for common comments
I have but 3 that fit at the moment

True and Beautiful

ethome
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4 posted 2001-02-20 06:33 AM


Hey Sunshine! Hello again! I love the places that the reader can go with this one...either from your virtuality or from a construed perspective of their own...I think I missed this one the first time...but you could repost all of yours and I would read them again....take care!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-02-20 08:45 AM


Yes Lone Wolf...what is important is to take time to heed the words now, and make sure that the people who are a part of your life are told how appreciated they really are....thank you....

'Deer, yes....we should all take the "I wish I had" to "I'm glad I can...."

Voiceless, those three words are very welcome, thank you....

Ethome, what a lovely thing for you to write....thank you very much my friend....

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