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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2001-02-19 04:06 PM


(The poem I wrote that brought me here
- the last non-PIP piece written before I came here)

A warm fall breeze lifts the leaves
Exposing their alternate color
Softly on my skin -I feel your presence
Waking dormant feelings I can't ignore
Spreading Goosebumps raising hairs
It will soon be prickles giving foretaste
Of passion always to come

I'm standing in a shallow pool
Under the waterfall that is you
Filling this empty vessel that is me
Rinsing me clean
Washing away my iniquities
I feel I'll burst, my skin with such sheen

Ripples spread across the pool
Cones of leaves twirl across the meadow
Trees shedding, bending in a fall ballet
A hint of smoke, and cider fill the scented air
You across the continent are here with me
Oh yes - you are here
I feel you in each tiny drop
Cascading from my arms
And in each wafted breeze
That carries your scent

I turn and embrace the water's fall
Let its fluid rush conceive substantial you
The watery flow runs through my skies
All the rainbows that I see
Are sparkles from your eyes

The spilling spirit you my aqua vitae
Ponce De Leon has found his fountain now
Becomes my skin and enters in
Akin we are, despite so far, I feel you deep within
I imagine you can feel me as I feel you

So we cavort in water stained with fall
Tannin brown from leaves withal
Sharing kisses wet and glorious
Were we seen we'd be notorious
And thus I smile first time today
And whisper words you'd have me say
As into rhyme our speech falls easy
Laughter in our talk so breezy

For all I am when I'm with you
For all that's good, you in me imbue
I'm giving thanks to you nightly
And equal thanks to the almighty
You fill my heart you fill my soul
My very lungs you do control
You're in the air I draw each breath
There you'll stay until my death
My mold sincere with Latin meaning
In you I find all love I'm gleaning
Then like two geese we gently nest
Forever mated we take our rest




Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes.

~ Chinese Proverb ~


© Copyright 2001 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-02-19 04:33 PM


So many lines that we can relate to....and I don't care what reason brought you to Passions, we are just fortunate that you are here....
Sven
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2 posted 2001-02-19 07:43 PM


indeed. . .

this is superb Sir. . . I have learned much from you in your time here. . . thank you. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Poet deVine
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3 posted 2001-02-19 10:55 PM


Simply beautiful.
Balladeer
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4 posted 2001-02-19 10:58 PM


an excellent poem of declared love and dedication, Bill. You do that so well....
Voiceless
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5 posted 2001-02-19 11:03 PM



A pure love written in a excellent poem..

Paula Finn
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6 posted 2001-02-20 01:41 AM


I love this...each line a touch of love a droplet slowly slipping down my skin...
ethome
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7 posted 2001-02-20 05:58 AM


This is so warm and full of love Bill...the quality of your writing here is so very effective!
Very well done!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

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8 posted 2001-02-20 03:01 PM


This is so lovely... I especially like the last verse!
nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2001-02-20 06:06 PM


as always..just lovely Bill {{huggs}}

~Wynter/Maureen

*message me when you are up to it, please

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Irie
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10 posted 2001-02-20 06:15 PM


Wilfred....
I know I've said this before, but I'm overriding my self.
This, to me, is the best piece you've penned.
So many lines touch me personally.....I felt every word as I read it.
I especailly love the last stanza.....

You've done a fantastic job, not only with you words, but your
format, flow and expression!
Hats off to you Sir....
Very well done!


~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"




[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 02-20-2001).]

Wilfred Yeats
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11 posted 2001-02-21 07:30 AM


I'm so grateful for your replies - (i truly wish I had time to thank you all individually - certainly most of the replies have earned that - I'm undergoing treatment right now - and if the good Lord is willing - I'll feel better soon - Meanwhile - Pray for me as I pray for you - and thank you again
Martie
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12 posted 2001-02-21 07:26 PM


Bill--You write of love with such dedication and sincerity...This is beautiful!
Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2001-02-22 11:05 AM


Martie - I love having you among my rooters Thank you
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