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Waking on the verge of destruction
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Waking on the verge of destruction |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Waking on the verge of destruction I fell asleep on a cloudless day on the shores of a beach sublime, to let my dismal thoughts swim away, and ease this troubled mind. I dreamed of a man garnished in hope who picked me up like a child, and left the sand in his wake to tread on a concrete's mile. He carried me with arms so strong, to protect me from all my woes and walked, with legs of satin strength, over ditches left by my soul. He held his ground with every stride and squeezed me when I was afraid. A burden I must have bared to him but his love, my despair could not fade. A familiar sun of yonder days arose at the end of the road and gently kissed our faces red, as we beheld a beauty untold. He set me down with a graceful touch peering deeply into my eyes and wrapped me within tender arms to reassure his love was mine. As I woke from the shores of sweet sublime, I heard the empty echoes scream from an angry ocean spewing my dismay, and telling me it was all but a dream. "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This has the flow of a ballad, it's moving and with wonderful cadence...I hung on every line. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Beautiful!!!!!!!! I loved it! Wonderful rhythm......... To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You have been missed...welcome back and with such an awesome write too... |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Kathleen - thank you so much for stopping by to read my poem. your kind words are greatly appreciated  dreamkeeper- thank you dreamkeeper for your wonderful words  Paula finn - thank you paula for your very kind words and welcome. in all actuality i wrote this poem as a valentine present and then i said to myself that i should put it in the forums. i'm glad that u enjoyed and i look forward to reading up on any of ur works that i have missed "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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