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The theft of a smile
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The theft of a smile |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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its kind of long...but its straight from the heart...and I like it more than anything i have written in a long time.....so here goes  sigh The Theft of A Smile She raised her brush to transcribe her life's masterpiece: The Theft of A Smile On her pallet she dabbed a bit of this and a bit of that mixing as she went along. She knew she had to start with the colors named Anger and Hate, she had an over abundance of both and they would only get in the way. She blended them into many different shades all of which she labeled You. Punishing the canvas, repeatedly, the brush saturated and frayed and her painting ruined, she had no choice but to start anew. She then delicately brushed an unobtainable need for freedom with a color she called Broken Wings. When sadness took her hostage she mixed her paint with tears and flooded her canvas with a color she simply called Blue. Those days when sunshine was nowhere to be seen she added in a self portrait with a shade she called Despair and that once...or was it more... she created a paint that she didn't want to remember and detailed a desire for death with a mixture called I Wish I Wasn't Me. The aroma of the paint was heavy it knocked her to the floor but she needed to go on her painting was nearly half way complete. Reaching out she righted herself in front of her easel, quickly swirling A Refusal to Give In with Somehow I Will Make This Right calling it Rigid Resolve. She united Love At First Sight and Fire and fashioned one called Passionate Dreams. Her brush poised her canvas expanded, she expected to paint the sky, but all too soon it bled into the color of Love Gone Wrong and she ended up with a color she called Goodbye. She blended Broken Promises and Lies into a color called Untrue and for many days after that she painted with a color that no one could see. When fellow artisans asked for a description of this hue she gave it the name Hopelessness; and this they understood. And that day when it finally got too heavy to carry with just her own strength she mixed up a special paint. She wasn’t sure how, she took the mix on faith, and it eased her soul to create one called Leaning on a Higher Power. She never finished her masterpiece the paints proved too costly. The blending of so many hues she could no longer afford so softly she set it aside. These days she paints still life in grayscale with a color at first she couldn't identify. But each time she painted with it, it became easier to mix and soon she had it memorized. She longed to name it Comfortable but for some reason it didn't feel quite right so she changed the ending and called it Comfortably Numb. [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-19-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
whata piece of writing----- I've been doing fingerpainting - feeling like a kid again...I love this "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And I can see why it pleases you....well done! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Grin... nice piece Corazon, nice piece...  K...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She never finished her masterpiece the paints proved too costly. The blending of so many hues she could no longer afford so softly she set it aside. These days she paints still life in grayscale with a color at first she couldn't identify. But each time she painted with it, it became easier to mix and soon she had it memorized. She longed to name it Comfortable but for some reason it didn't feel quite right so she changed the ending and called it Comfortably Numb. ===================== "She never finished her masterpiece the paints proved too costly. The blending of so many hues she could no longer afford so softly she set it aside." WOW ... talk about impact and well worked metaphor ... and hey ..nice to see the face and name here accompaning the poetry  intense, excellent write C. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
kathleen......lol@fingerpainting...yep the little one loves for us to do crafts...and fingerpainting is joyous thank youSunshine.....thank you Severn, love that grin thank you lady JM, thank you, once it was done, I got shaky about the presentation...your comments help thank you lady |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"and for many days after that she painted with a color that no one could see. When fellow artisans asked for a description of this hue she gave it the name Hopelessness; and this they understood." I recognized so many of these colors, but had never known their names... But in a poem that is stunning from beginning to end, this verse keeps claiming my attention. What a superb description of hopelessness... the invisible hue that colors our lives... WOW! "But each time she painted with it, it became easier to mix and soon she had it memorized. She longed to name it Comfortable but for some reason it didn't feel quite right so she changed the ending and called it Comfortably Numb." Again... outstanding!! I don't have the words to tell you how much I like this one... but I think you know how much I wish for the day when Happiness covers your life canvas. *S* |
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zoe Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 34 |
what can i say? didn't bump it on purpose *goofy smile*......*shrug*some day i will know who i am supposed to be [This message has been edited by zoe (edited 02-20-2001).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well some day i will get this right...someday...thank you suthern, your comments on my poems are the topping on the dessert.....its ok, but not the same without it |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Wow!..You had me hooked from start to end....fabulous piece and so totally you... HUGS ooops burnt dinner..  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...hope you find the color to return a smile to your face...James |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is absolutely OUTSTANDING! BRAVO, applause! I love it, every color mixed, given a name. It is a "Master" piece! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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WhiteKnight Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 83NY |
Beautifuly done. I love this one. WhiteKnight |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
powerful writing excellent poem! |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
All i can say is this I love it~ |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
RG...good to see you here...and yep, notice the name I chose to post it under *g* this is me.....sigh James, WhtDove, WhiteKnight, NC, and Voiceless, thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment |
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