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Adam and Lilith
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Adam and Lilith |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Adam and Lilith "Is it the wind or the serpent’s tongue that nibbles On my ear and sends ripples Across clear puddles?" --And yet, another night, your apparition has come to haunt me in a gory vision! I beg you, Lilith, let me be at last! O, don’t evoke the gardens of the past, I’ve long forgotten Eden! Don’t remind my wearied heart of treasures it can find nowhere on earth. I beg you, disappear... --O, Adam, you are dazed with fear! --Was that the wind or have I heard your voice? --You’ve called on me and now you don’t rejoice? --Be gone, damned spirit! Disappear for good! --You’ve yet to taste the magic of the fruit... --You cannot tempt me twice, I’ve had my share; my paradise is lost, my world stands bare, my God is raged. --No free man needs a God! --This blasphemy! O, Lilith, tempt me not, my mind is clear for He still guides my way and there is nothing you can do or say to blind me. The star still shines to guide myself, a traveler, to heaven with its light. --You need no star! Its light can only chill... --Without it, I’d be lost! – You have free will... --These lies cannot deceive a faithful ear, I listen to you not! — But you still hear! In vain, you dream of heaven, there is no life after death. – Then, where do all men go? --Into a vacuum, which consumes all life... --Existence, in your view, is only strife and there’s no justice in the end of time?! --There is no justice for there is no crime. There is no sin. It’s but a shade of good... and that’s the juice of the forbidden fruit,-- for that, which casts no shadow cannot be... Dear Adam, you are overflowed with glee? --Ha-ha-ha! I understand! You don’t exist, and nothing hangs above me, just the mist... O, dear, insomnia! what you create to keep a wearied man away from rest and sleep... ------------------ Check out more of my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master [This message has been edited by Master (edited 02-18-2001).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What a dreamful drama this is. Your evocative references serve this form well, I believe. The subtle and sometimes near rhyme and easy enjambment lend well to the smoothness of your tale. Wonderful writing. Thanks for it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This was interesting, as "Lilith" is a subject dear to my heart---I DO SO relate to her, as I fear that we are both sadly misunderstood. But I love your work 'o master! always a mind's journey to read you. I thank you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
superb Master. . . I love the way you flowed between the two of them. . . excellent. . . and now, a side note: I'm not surprised that serenity can relate to Lilith!! She may have been Lilith!! ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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