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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-02-18 04:46 AM


I cannot grasp an element,
nor route of verse to implement,
no pattern I to cut in bless
and crumple, rumples, plaintive mess

I wish I pray I were more bold
in patterned rhyme in time of olde
and colors fast with fruit of sigh
reborn in cast of nature's dye!

give me now your fingertips
and rub them gently on my lips
all my longing--soul in sip--
give me reason to tell lie....

Kiss me, love.
O kiss me twice.
...nothing, nothing...
can suffice.
Nothing's all I've ever known...
I pack my bags. I need new home.

Oh give me reason to forestep
forgetting second guess regret
and every hold upon the crag
footstep further up the path

let me at it? let me in?
If this a game? I SPIN AGAIN.
yet in my mind, I must surcease...
I pray that I can go in peace.

© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
1 posted 2001-02-18 04:53 AM


pack em......helen
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
2 posted 2001-02-18 05:36 AM


serenity,
you don't need another style to show your feelings, this is done perfectly Olde language or not.
Write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2001-02-18 06:26 AM


It's all a game to a certain extent. Everyone seems to spin somewhere along the line.....but you know Celeste these things have a funny way of working themselves out. You have been turning out poetry like you are a word fountain lately and I have to say I have enjoyed it very much!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

walker
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since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240
Florida
4 posted 2001-02-18 07:20 AM


Lovely said.

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2001-02-18 08:45 AM


"let me at it? let me in?
If this a game? I SPIN AGAIN."

Wonderful writing Serenity! This flowed just beautifully ... I really enjoyed this piece, many applause here!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2001-02-18 08:52 AM


This is woven just fine...it is always a pleasure to read your work.
doreen peri
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7 posted 2001-02-18 09:10 AM


funny how all those free drinks at the casino can effect you, eh? sorta makes ya look around at all those attractive men.... makes ya think.... hmmm...... makes ya think metaphorically!!!

Love is a game, alright, and it's certainly a gamble and it ain't no fun playing alone so when the other person isn't playing??? spin again, my friend... spin again...




[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 02-18-2001).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-02-18 09:50 AM


I wish I pray I were more bold
in patterned rhyme in time of olde
and colors fast with fruit of sigh
reborn in cast of nature's dye!

give me now your fingertips
and rub them gently on my lips
all my longing--soul in sip--
give me reason to tell lie....

Kiss me, love.
O kiss me twice.
...nothing, nothing...
can suffice.
Nothing's all I've ever known...
I pack my bags. I need new home.

Oh give me reason to forestep
forgetting second guess regret
and every hold upon the crag
footstep further up the path

let me at it? let me in?
If this a game? I SPIN AGAIN.
yet in my mind, I must surcease...
I pray that I can go in peace.

===========================

oh me twin of heart and poet of mirrors ...
this is so classic sen ...
and so beautiful in its honesty and emotions
and so perfect in its poetic graces.
we all do what we gotta do to get by ...
love ya Sen
me


You move a sudden grace,
a child upon the Earth
**You wanted love to find you
but you found it first**

And even though I'm right behind you
Shadows haunt and taunt your hand
I cannot be your everything
But I'll be your candyman

And though you cry at night
It's to be expected
But know you're mine tonight

So when the sun has died
you dive into your mind
**But your soul is never lost
until the deal is signed**

And even though I'm right behind you
Shadows haunt and taunt your hand
I cannot be your everything
But I'll be your candyman

Candyman
Vertical Horizon
cd:Live Stages




As sure as God made wine
you can't wrap your arms around a memory
In the dark for me
youre the candle flame that flickers to life
~Mission UK~


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-18-2001).]

Sven
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9 posted 2001-02-18 02:21 PM


step right up. . .
spin the wheel. . .
place your bets. . .

just not that one. . .

superb serenity. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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