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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2001-02-17 03:09 PM



Frosted Whispers

While curled up
in the easy chair
tracing memories
on frosted glass,
listening to
the laughter of
the past whip
through the
barren trees
and burst into
a flock of
mocking birds
grinning at the
foolishness
of friends
they wink
with a knowing
to Luna who came
down to sit with me
tonight,
and I whispered
to her
just leave



[This message has been edited by Snow (edited 02-17-2001).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-02-17 03:43 PM


I read this three times Snow, and received three different gifts....well done....very well done....
inot2B
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2 posted 2001-02-17 03:50 PM


Beautifully written, I'm sorry you're so sad.
VAS
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3 posted 2001-02-17 03:51 PM


I love the feel of this, it truly whispers, but I have to say I'm taken aback by the last line...whatever could have happened that would bid you to say to Luna just leave? Oh, the thought is agony for me.
EagleScorpion
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4 posted 2001-02-17 03:56 PM


I think i have an idea of how you must have felt. Cheer up
Snow
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5 posted 2001-02-18 02:16 AM


Sunshine, thank you! I'm so glad you said that.

Although it's easy to assume the writer is feeling what they write, I really would like to say that is not always the case.
This piece is done, simply because I love to create, I love the idea of layering so many thoughts and visions that you might be able to see further than the surface.
I truly appreciate each and every comment, but I assure you I am no where near feeling sad. Just the opposite.. *smiling*

Thank you all very much for taking the time to read and comment.

Snow

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