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Moonlight Shadows Dancing
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Moonlight Shadows Dancing |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 ~Moonlight Shadows Dancing~ In the moonlight shadows dancing, in night's cascading, ebony, quiet of still ... love's lingering trace ... transcends time and space, for in the moonlight shadows ... infinite silences until. In the moonlight shadows dancing, in the ribbons of midnight's translucent mist ... fate and destiny ... kiss meant to be, for in moonlight shadows ... forever's constant exists. In the moonlight shadows dancing, sapphire stars glow in liquid indigo of night sky ... whispers of love are spoken ... no promises shall be broken, for in moonlight shadows ... dreams dance on wings of butterflies. In the moonlight shadows dancing, cerulean oceans rise up to meet the horizon's caress ... Baptizing me ... in emerald pools of your memory, the mystical magic ... moonlight shadows posses. In the moonlight shadows dancing, violet twilight gives way to black satin hold of night ... I willingly surrender to ... the enchanting hold of you, as moonlight shadows ... surrender to dawns embracing light. Janet Marie  **thank you to Sunshine's lovely repost (of this former challenge theme) for the inspiration. As sure as God made wine you can't wrap your arms around a memory In the dark for me youre the candle flame that flickers to life ~Mission UK~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh someone quick....send me a little icon thingie with clapping hands that make noise! Brava! Brava! JM....this soars! The stars are happy! The man in the moon is smiling! Oh well done! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'In the moonlight shadows dancing, cerulean oceans rise up to meet the horizon's caress ... Baptizing me ... in emerald pools of your memory, the mystical magic ... moonlight shadows possess.' OK...this is excellent! Sheesh...I could definitely learn a thing or two from this...wonderful work, JM!! Great graphics, too! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh yes! This is superb! I love the graphics with your poem. Wonderfully done Janet.  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jan- as always your words float their way into my heart and just melt there. this is just so beautiful...wonderfully written with your usual style and grace. just loved this! love ya amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, This is definitely a peanut butter and jelly sandwich and I love peanut and jelly. WW Stinky. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sweets...when you are by inspiration you weave with it's beauty like no other.... this is so delicate and beautiful..just like you my sweet SS...just like you...I know you want to know about cadence and rhyme but baby you also know your poetry...I don't need to tell you that this one shines...you feel it and you KNOW...I'll just get the pillows and worship the queen of weave... Love you girlie...and Love to see you weave~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Again and again.........you blow me away.........so beautiful Janet........so beautiful!!!! SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Your words dance across the pages of my heart...this is gorgeous! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - this is just wonderfully penned! Wow!~ You take this challenge to new levels, extremely well done, and yes, those graphics are stunning. Take care, Melissa~ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ In the moonlight shadows dancing, violet twilight gives way to black satin hold of night ... I willingly surrender to ... the enchanting hold of you, as moonlight shadows ... surrender to dawns embracing light. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ No words can inhance the beauty in this poem. It's perfect. Deb |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
JM, this poem is more beautiful than I have words for....amazing you are... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ A stunningly lovely piece. I enjoyed the imagery so very much. The graphics were icing - on a perfectly baked cake. *Hugs*, sweetie. *And my god ! To get a 'PEANUT BUTTER AND JELLY review from Seymour ... is to rank at the TOP of the charts ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Simply beautiful JM. Always the impressed (especially this time) admirer, ~Krissie "And I wanted you to turn away. You don't remember, but I do. You never even tried..." ~Fuel |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
beautifully written... enjoyed muchly. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtaking, Janet Marie! Very lovely! |
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Jazzmole Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 30Texas |
"sapphire stars glow in liquid indigo of night sky" Can I have this? I'll trade you one of mine for it! The imagery here is simply ethereal! I'm not sure that I understood all of the ellipses though. Were they for symmetrical purposes? I think commas and some clean line breaks would have made it even more powerful than it is.(if that be possible) I love this! I'll be looking for more of your work. Michael~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
You paint enchanting images with your words. beautifully penned. Poeminister |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet Marie, you have painted another beautiful picture-poem. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, ME |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey there my poet pet, this is beautiful....wow....it dreams right through reality, on the edge of consciousness looking into the chasm of the heart...beautiful my dear girl just beautiful! "for in moonlight shadows....forever's constant exists" "sapphire stars glow in liquid indigo of night sky. whispers of love are spoken....no promises shall be broken." for in moonlight shadows...dreams dance on wings of butterflies." now that's poetry! I remember the first poem I posted at Passions....it started like this..... "That moonlit flight the night we met there were stars all around in the air. They shone like diamnods through the mist and a moon harp played on your golden hair" What a great inspiration that good old moon has been to us poets...it not only pulls at the water but it pulls at the tides of the mind...out of that inspiration comes the greatest feeling of peace and happiness and when you mix that with love then you've got a real poetic cocktail brewing....... Love to ya sweet poet pet... I really love this one! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"In the moonlight shadows dancing, cerulean oceans rise up to meet the horizon's caress ... Baptizing me ... in emerald pools of your memory, the mystical magic ... moonlight shadows posses." Simply stunning in verbage and presentation Janet Marie ... a most beautiful rendition that soothes the mind with gentle, tender caresses ... what a lovely mood you've set with these words. I really loved the gentle flow in this JM ... wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
JM, you've left me speechless...a rare thing indeed...equivalent to a Seymour peanut butter and jelly sandwich review. Write on and on and on please! Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay...so Sy gives you peanut butter and jelly and well deserved at that but I offer a HUGE plate of brussel sprouts swimming in cheese. This was beautiful my friend and not only did you mix the rhyme in the 2/4 with the in line rhyme in the 3 but you NAILED the cadence "PERFECTLY" ....... Now let's talk IMAGERY.........I CLAIM IT FOR ME AND IF ANYBODY WANTS TO ARGUE THEN THEY GOTTA KNOW...........I AIN'T GONNA BACK DOWN ON IT ONE BIT. LOL. Your imagery in this one is so superbly done and so lovingly presented that I know your heart was singing with more than one muse when you wrote it. Your line breaks with the famous (...'s) were done masterfully in controlling the tempo of the read and I am in awe my friend. Now I think I must try to keep up with you in mine but that is NOT going to be easy so if I fail then know it is not from lack of trying but merely lack of resources in my capabilities.  (don't say it......I know what you are going to say already) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"Moonlight Shadows" - these 2 words have been used (me too) many times - in poems, lyrics and prose. I'll sum up my reply by claiming that this is the quintessential Moonlight Shadows poem. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sunshine ... No applause needed...as long as you are smiling and enjoyed this then that's good enough for me...Thank you for reposting yours and bringing on the moon's inspire .. I have always wanted to write one for this challenge phrase...so thanks for the chance my friend Snowpants... well I thank ya for such a way cool reply and you already know where my imagery inspiration comes from... I had a really good teacher  Im so glad you saw what I was trying for here. thanks Sharon ... thank you for the superb comments and yes ... the pics went perfect with the poem...so glad you enjoyed Amy ... thank you sweets...your replies flow across my heart the same way thanks for your always wonderful encouragement Sy-babes ... Well... what can I say to a PB&J rating??? Now that I know you and Randy love it so ... I'll have to rub some behind my ears LOL ... thank you my sweet Stinkywinkie Holly... thank you me SS... me thinks ya see me thru butterfly eyes..but I love ya for it....and I wont even touch the knees/worship comment LOL ..but your the queen of weave me sweet... Thank you me girlie...love ya  Sea ... well I thank you so much for the beautiful reply ...your words mean much to me Martie...and your reply is gorgeous my sweet friend... thank you me girliegirl Melissa.... thank you sweets for the wow and for such a wonderful compliment Deb ... your words and compliments were more than enough .. thank you for the beautiful reply Deer ... your words are better than spammykisses... and I thank you for such an amazing reply Margie ... your reply is making me hungry LOL.. cake and PB&J ,mmmm mmm thank you sweetie .. for the compliments and hugs ... hugs right back at-ch-ya. Krissie ... thank you sweets...for the very kind words...its so great to see your name here. Mike .. thank you poet sir ... Im so glad you enjoyed Denise ... thank you so much for the lovely reply and so was yours!! Jazzmole .. yes.. you may have it...I'll be sure and let ya know when i see one of yours I want LOL .. thank you for such a great reply ... as for the line breaks/ellipses(...) its kind of a trademark in some of my poetry....and also at times a "bad habit" of mine..in this case it was to add to the overall appearance of the poem and to add emphasis to certain phrases and pauses in the cadence. I thank you much for the suggestion..I always want to see the poem thru someone else's eyes..its how I learn and then grow... thanks poet sir. Poeminister ... I thank you much poet sir for the enchanting reply and compliments. ME ... Thank you for such a wonderful reply .. So glad you enjoyed this one E-babes .. there you go spoiling me again.. Thank you so much for this generous and encouraging reply .. and for sharing your beautiful verse..yes there is definite connection between poets and the moon ... one of our fav muses for sure... thank you for always being so Vantastic to me and my work. Kit ... oh its so good to see your name and smiling face back here.... and your reply flows, soothes and caresses too Thank you so much for such kind words. Keth ... I will take your speechless as the high compliment that it is intended .. thank you girlie..very much Mark ... well baby you can claim it all ya want ... cause you already know your the reason and inspiration behind me learning to write with more imagery ... and when I had such a gifted teacher .. how could I fail, Thank you my sweet MC for such a all seeing and knowing reply ...can I trade those brussels for hot chips LOL ... never mind...Ill keep them for your poem.. cause you and I both know just how "capable" you are   and cowboy ...always remember...I appreeeeciaaaaate ya haha ROFLMAO!!  Bill ... you humble me with such generous compliments and I thank you dearly for them poet sir I am most grateful for them and you.thank you all for your many kind words and encouragement. love to poetry land jm As sure as God made wine you can't wrap your arms around a memory In the dark for me youre the candle flame that flickers to life ~Mission UK~ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece has a gentle beauty about it...I loved the way you intertwined the theme with love.....excellent write, Janet! Nathan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks so much Nate ...I appreciate the kind words As sure as God made wine you can't wrap your arms around a memory In the dark for me youre the candle flame that flickers to life ~Mission UK~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
When Moonlight shadow dancing... does one have to be nakkid.... cause I would think obviously it must be a pre-req.. Very nice brown-eyes, come to the moonlight with me. Parker |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I willingly surrender too the enchanting hold of you." Enjoyed the wonderful flow and mood...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
P-man ... thank you sweet tease... and I think that could be subject matter for another poem in another forum lolnice to see your name here today p-babes James.. thank you kind poet sir... Im so pleased you enjoyed this... I really enjoyed writing this one. thank you all Love is my religion I believe in nothing else to find that inspiration live that inner vision love is my religion I believe in you. ~T Kimmel~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, the beauty of your poetry always leaves me in awe. Definitely one for the library. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dee ... what a beautiful thing to say..thank you very much and Im honored to be in your library..its great to see your name back here as well thanks all for these wonderful replies love to poetry land jm Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
adding to library Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
The beauty in both the pictures and the words are overwhelming! I enjoyed reading this thank you! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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