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walker
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since 2001-02-11
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0 posted 2001-02-17 10:12 AM



Apart from me you wondered,
only but a second it took, for
a fake rose to offered her
costly heart. You returned
with guilty hands. All the time
turning your head, hiding your
knowing eyes. With your life you do deny.
But your gaze, it cannot lie. It cannot
hide all the pain, that her thorns
inflicted in them.


A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

© Copyright 2001 walker - All Rights Reserved
laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
Posts 352
Alberta, Canada
1 posted 2001-02-17 10:19 AM


This is wonderful - a talented twist to a heavy-duty topic....Nicely done!
Lary

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-02-17 10:22 AM


only but a second it took, for
a fake rose to offered her
costly heart. You returned
with guilty hands.
================
With your life you do deny.
But your gaze, it cannot lie. It cannot
hide all the pain, that her thorns
inflicted in them.
===============

what a very cool poem!!!
i love this cryptic "little" poem of impact
so much imagery and emotion spoken in so few well chosen words.
succinct and perfect in its use of metaphor
very very cool poem walker

As sure as God made wine
you can't wrap your arms around a memory
In the dark for me
youre the candle flame that flickers to life
~Mission UK~

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
3 posted 2001-02-18 11:27 AM


Hi Walker,

This I loved, very powerfully done as well, thank you enjoyed the reading.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
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KS
4 posted 2001-02-18 11:39 AM


'But your gaze, it cannot lie.'

Yes, very good write on such a subject, walker! I did enjoy this!

sp


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

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