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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I don’t want to go back in there... I become someone I’m not... and I don’t like her Please don’t make me go, because... . . . I’m afraid I will learn that who I become... . . . . is really who I am. . . Please, . . don’t make me go. © February 17, 2001 |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Can't imagine you letting anyone make you do something that you do not want to do...you're a poet and a poet always ends up being an independent thinker... every way you look at it the poet is an individual of his/her very own and that in itself is so wonderful....very thought provoking write once again...take care! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sometimes...I feel this way.. sometimes...I don't want to be me any longer sometimes...is just sometimes.... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Wow - to say so much so well in so few words ....what can I say - amazing! Lary |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
VAS, my mouth opened wide when i read this poem and i assure you, i dont often behave like that!! i also liked to say that i think the large font is well used here...however, may i challenge you to write a poem using extra small font since i have seen several poems of yours with this atyle? curious to see what you will come up with?  |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
VAS, my mouth opened wide when i read this poem and i assure you, i dont often behave like that!! i also liked to say that i think the large font is well used here...however, may i challenge you to write a poem using extra small font since i have seen several poems of yours with this atyle? curious to see what you will come up with? |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
.... sounds like the cry of a child ..... very dynamic |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Hello, all, thanks for reading. If you read my "Frazzled Dazzle" it will explain what instigated this poem, "Please." Economics is what motivates me to go in to the classroom in which I feel so out of control of myself. I don't like feeling that angry with students. It's the particular mix of students that make it an extremely stressful classroom. And I don't like what I see of myself when I sub in that room. That's what motivated this poem. A complete desire that I can make a living subbing in classrooms that don't bring out the 'animal' so to speak, in me. In the choice of 'fight' or 'flight' I'm probably more prone to 'flight'. Yet, I feel compelled to accept subbing with some classes I would really prefer not to enter. They don't play favorites either. Other subs that have other income don't go to classrooms like this one anymore. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ok... i'm back again... hmmmm.... been thinking about this one... it can be read in many ways and the beauty of the art form is that the reader can interpret poetry in a way that they identify with.... at first, i read this, perceiving of it in a way that reminded me of my son, when he would have to go visit his father on weekends and didn't really want to go... never really felt "at home" there, and didn't feel close at all to his stepmother... probably didn't like her much (i hope that's changed some now that he's older... *sigh*)... anyway... that's how i read it because he would say to me, "please don't make me go".... so this is a really good poem because it hit me hard, remembering those sad words and his tears.... but now that i read it again... this could be taken in many ways.... and i'm thinking that it also reminds me of me... not wanting to go back home to a verbally abusive relationship, knowing that the words which were thrown at me changed me... turned me inside out... made me some other woman that i wasn't.... this is a very powerful piece because it is so concise and succinct, and says so much with so few words... and all of the words can be interpreted in several ways.... i like it very much..... people often tell me my work is too long (then i say, what about the iliad and the oddessy and shakespeare's plays? LOL)..... and i respect the ability to say so much with so few words.... i'm in advertising... graphics/copywriting... and we do always say... "less is more"... this is a piece that proves that...  thanks again for a wonderful read and for making me think and remember.... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
whoops, double post [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 02-18-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thanks Doreen for taking time to speak your thoughts, and even taking time to consider this piece so much. You definitely homed in on my intent with this piece in your second interpretation. It is exciting that more than one idea can come out of a piece, especially one I wrote. When I am faced with abusive and/or disrespectful attack by anyone, I try with all my might, but finally I retaliate. I don't like the person I see and hear when that happens, and I so don't want to be her. I also don't want to find out that I really am her. I just thought of a line in a song, "When the chips are down, watch where you step." It's from "Cow Patty" a silly spoof country song. Yet, the advice is pure gold. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Step lightly among the chips, Virginia...don't forget that some of them produce lovely wildflowers... I could not do what you do, but I envy you that you can! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I really enjoyed this Virginia ... both the poem and the resulting comments back and forth! What a great discussion. I too interpreted your poem within my own realm of thought. Amazing how closely so many of us can relate to these words within our own worlds. Great writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thank you Sunshine and Kit for dropping in, so glad you enjoyed the stop. I enjoyed your comments, too! |
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