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I Lost You In A Dream
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I Lost You In A Dream |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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"I LOST YOU IN A DREAM" by Bill Charles ~~~~ My eyes play tricks, not knowing what they see, for I thought it was you, standing always next to me… Close enough to touch, and to whisper in your ear, how happy I am to be near you, knowing that you care… I reached out to hold you, as I always did before, only this time my embrace, was something to deplore… I only felt the emptiness, where you should have been, and I was puzzled how this happened, let me try it once again… This time when I reached, the same thing did happen, you were no longer there, and I became even more forsaken… Emptiness and loneliness, became my very best friends, I could feel my torn heart, as if it were at all ends… My mind is saying, all is not what it seems, it's not real, so very perplexing for me, not knowing about this deal… My heart is tormented, and I can hear its pain scream, because somewhere within the anguish, "I Lost You In A Dream"… ~~~~ [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (edited 02-16-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Bill ... such a sorrowful feeling, and you've captured it so well, very nicely done indeed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I loved the title! It drew me in to read the poem and I'm so glad I did. It's sadly lovely. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Bill--If my heart could stand any more pain today, it would break for us both. (I've decided to take what's left of this day to wallow). Your words express your heart well. |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Bill, this is very well done, very evocative. The line between dream and reality can be quite blurred at times. In an ideal world, what we dream and what is real would be the same. Hope your real becomes all you have dreamed of some day. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful write Bill! I really got the feel of this one into my perspecive...and thanking you.... ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
emptiness has become my mirrored partner... Emptiness Wondering as I sit viewing myself how much my face has changed in the last year. How the smiles that used to turn up at the corners of my lips have inverted to frowns, more often than not or even become a non-smile, a non-frown if there is such a thing... and how I hate that look of the deadened eyes that stare back now with empty tears. Sometimes I don't recognize myself and I try to welcome this face into my life, trying to make her feel warm and wanted again. Speaking silently with my eyes I almost plead for her friendship to help fill my emptiness... but even she denies me. And so another sun has risen another day begun, bringing with it hope. But as each afternoon and evening arrives that face rarely changes and silently I carry on as if tomorrow might be the day... M *2k huggzz, Bill "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bill..... This one made my heart ache.......but as everything that you write, it was beautifully done..... Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Bill, This poem echos the pain I feel right now so well I think you have managed to read my heart.. is that possible? |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Such a beautiful expression of quite an empty feeling, Bill! I like this! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears falling down my cheeks) This was so very sad, but also very beautiful, for your love shines through the clouds of melancholy. Fear not, you will find her outside of your dreams! You have such a beautiful heart, my friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Bill-- you write such sadness so beautifully! touched my heart with this one, you did. wonderful! take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kit - I see that you are from Canada. I do love it there, and hope to return someday. But my sorrow is within. I thank you for your comments. Poet deVine - glad that the title caught your eye, it's alway nice to hear from you. Thanks for coming by, and the comments. JLR - if mine could also stand any more pain, we could get together and fill the desert with tears. Thank you for being so kind with your comments. kcsgrandma - thank you for your gracious comments about this writing. Dreams and reality can be blurred at times, but the hope is always there that the happy dream will become, that reality. Thanks for coming by. ethome - nice to see you, hope things are well with you. And I say to you, thank you for not only stopping for a read, but for your kind comments. Thanks again. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - thank you for the most meaningful words to me which you have written. I don't know what else to say except they are beautiful, and have touched me. Sunny - my most gracious friend, how are you? Your words, always ones of kindness, and I do thank you. rosepetals25 - perhaps it may not be possible to read your heart, but I have read many of your writings, and can tell that it is very gracious. I wish you well. snowpants - I'm glad that you liked what I wrote within this writing. And yes, quite an empty feeling it is. Mistletoe Angel - nice to see you. You are one of the most gracious persons that I have met here on Passions. Thank you for your most gracious comments, and also your deep sincerity. Aimster - thank you for the comment from your heart. I never thought that I wrote the way you said, "writing such sadness so beautifully". You did open my eyes to this, and I am grateful that you did. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Bill, How sad when we find I realitys are but a dream, exceptional writing here, very much enjoyed. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Bill Just by reading this, one can feel the pain and sadness come through. What a beautiful talent you have. Ariana |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, I think I found you in this dream. A wonderful write. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cerenity - hi, thank you for the words of exceptional, wow, this felt really good. And I'm glad that you enjoyed. Ariana - yes, the pain is there, so is the sadness. One wonders when it will ever end. Seymour Tabin - a'hhhh, me thanks you for the kindness of your reply. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Those phantoms sure do leave empty arms, don't they? *S* This is so sad, Bill... and beautifully written. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Love and loss and pain. And the confusion at times on what reality is or was and finding it not what we thought. I went through something so much like this, I cried for the rememberance, and for the emotion you've portrayed. It leaves you very fragile, doesn't it. My own experience left me wondering how love is really supposed to be. If something so beautiful can turn so painful, does it mean we're doing it wrong? I still wonder. I'm so glad I was browsing and found this. Beautiful, heartfelt, and deep. "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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