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Celeste
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since 2000-11-11
Posts 597


0 posted 2001-02-16 05:01 PM


I still long to capture you
within words that spill
the depths of you
that surround me
endlessly

Your fierce passion that knows
no boundries
Gentle love
that flooded my heart
with only a glance
or a word
so filled with tender emotion

Your laughter
so rich and free
It always leaves me smiling

Remembering

The depths of you
that embraced me
completely
in love

A gift you gave
Forever
In my heart


To capture and live a moment is truly living


© Copyright 2001 Celeste - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2001-02-16 05:08 PM


It's just the thought of you...the mere idea of you....and all those little ordinary things that everyone ought to do.......very good write!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06
Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up
2 posted 2001-02-16 07:16 PM


Touching poignant
you words reach and
touch how could they
not attain the ears

of he so lucky as to
herein described your
feeling flows over indeed
yet past tense may not

the proper form be in
this world of yesterdays
memories which lead tomorrow life
reveals dreams once emerge corporeal touches

no time disdains nor guides
all that is strikes chords alight
harmonies yet unsung but on and on
the symphony smiles waiting only to be heard

"Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition"

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2001-02-16 10:09 PM


Hi, I really understand the feeling expressed here, and you do it very well.
Great poem.
Sandra

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
4 posted 2001-02-17 11:02 AM


dreamkeeper, lovely...you're a keeper of dreams for sure, tender, poignant, loving dreams. well done!
walker
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since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240
Florida
5 posted 2001-02-17 11:47 AM


A person that's gentle,passionate and that makes one laugh,is very easy to love. Love it, well expressed!


A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
6 posted 2001-02-17 12:00 PM


Dreamkeeper....

I know now why you have the screen name you do!
This is a wonderful poem, well put together.
I love the first and last stanza's.
They say so much!
Enjoyed reading this piece.....


~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"



vandana
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since 1999-10-22
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USA
7 posted 2001-02-17 12:16 PM


liked this much
snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
8 posted 2001-02-17 02:48 PM


'I still long to capture you
within words that spill
the depths of you
that surround me
endlessly'

'The depths of you
that embraced me
completely
in love

A gift you gave
Forever
In my heart'

Absolutely beautiful poem, dreamkeeper! Definitely one of those 'you read my mind' sorta things...I have to keep this one!!

sp


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2001-02-17 03:57 PM


I still long to capture you
within words that spill
the depths of you
that surround me
endlessly

Your fierce passion that knows
no boundries
Gentle love
that flooded my heart
with only a glance
or a word
so filled with tender emotion
======================

very cool write ...
written with depth and intensity of emotion
excellent poem

As sure as God made wine
you can't wrap your arms around a memory
In the dark for me
youre the candle flame that flickers to life
~Mission UK~

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2001-02-18 06:39 AM


Dreamkeeper,
deep and powerful.
Write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
11 posted 2001-02-18 02:34 PM


this is wonderful. . .

I'm sure that you could see through almost any soul. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Poeminister
Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada
12 posted 2001-02-18 02:41 PM


Beautiful, very nicely penned.

Poeminister

Celeste
Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

13 posted 2001-02-18 04:52 PM


Thank you so much everyone! I was completely overwhelmed by all the responces to this poem, but I thank you. The struggle to capture the subject in those words was difficult. Appriciate your comments so much!

To capture and live a moment is truly living


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