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David2
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since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

0 posted 2001-02-15 07:17 PM

She Is My Love

She came and aches of emptiness were purged,
She spoke and pangs of sorrow soon dissolved.
She smiled and joys of knowing her emerged,
She laughed and sins of worry were absolved.
She gazed, her eyes the doorway to romance,
She sighed, her beauty real and radiant.
She felt her body tremble as to dance,
She wept her tears in solemn soft descent.
She moved me as none other had before,
She kissed me with a searing, lustful fire.
She touched me just to leave me wanting more,
She loved me with an honest pure desire

She allowed complete and full possession,
She is mine alone in sweet affection.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-02-15 08:03 PM

Beautifully romantic and overwhelmingly devoted...very well done!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-02-15 08:12 PM

She felt her body tremble as to dance,
She wept her tears in solemn soft descent.
She moved me as none other had before,
She kissed me with a searing, lustful fire.
She touched me just to leave me wanting more,
She loved me with an honest pure desire

She allowed complete and full possession,
She is mine alone in sweet affection.
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your sonnets are a sigh just waiting to happen David

and a bad case of poet envy as well.
wonderful emotional imagery, cadence here
excellence from your pen poet sir

When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger
your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool
you go running off in search of a perfect stranger

Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

3 posted 2001-02-15 10:05 PM

Wonderfully written. Always a pleasure to read and experience your poetry.

Jill
Member

since 2001-02-02

Posts 62
Louisiana

4 posted 2001-02-15 10:20 PM

I like this one - reads very tender and soft.

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

5 posted 2001-02-15 10:58 PM

Structured well, the alliteration and lyric air of your poem gives it the music this sort of passion deserves. Nicely written, David. Thanks for it.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Kate Bennet
New Member

since 2001-02-15

Posts 7
State of Disarray

6 posted 2001-02-16 08:54 PM

This is truly a beautiful poem from your heart. You express your feelings in a way that is tender and pure. I am saving this in my library.

Kate

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

7 posted 2001-02-16 09:02 PM

Written so sincerely from your heart, how can I help but love it?

emmalouise
Junior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 26

8 posted 2001-02-18 08:40 AM

Your talent for crafting poetry of intense and pure emotion is certainly a gift, and one that I hope you aren't taking for granted. I can't imagine any woman not being completely swept away by such pretty words...I always enjoy reading your work.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

9 posted 2001-02-18 09:09 AM

David,
February 14th is in your blood, and you ain't no stupid cupid, with words like this that speak of love could win a maiden's favour.
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

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