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Images of Love - a Sonnet
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Images of Love - a Sonnet |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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for all the slugs who haven't yet submitted in the poetry workshop as promised, this is my version of an imaged love poem. Only 14 days of February left! Thou art sunshine oh my love In blessed ray of golden charm The scent of rose the coo of dove Can all be found within your arm, Thou art a rainbow during rain The softening touch of morning mist Thy touch my love, canst keep me sane As red velvet lips yearn to be kissed Thou art the wind in springtime breeze Thou warmth of breath makes promise new In sacred prayer, I fall to my knees With whispered words for just we two Thou art by nature strong and fair I meet with thee, find passion there Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thou warmth of breath makes promise new In sacred prayer, I fall to my knees With whispered words for just we two Thou art by nature strong and fair I meet with thee, find passion there ================== to the head of the class she goes!!! Keth this is excellent... this style of writing becomes you... love the imagery laced with the romantic comparisons ... the vocab was the other pleasure here very well done ... you should make these a habit .. and I'll do the same readin them  When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry....kethry.....kethry.....you do Passions proud, little one... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful Kethry. . . and not to worry. . . this slug will have his in before the deadline!!!  ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kethry, JM said it best excellent piece. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) So sweet and romantic! And yes, you will kiss those red sweet lips and find all the love and passion your heart desires. You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you this lovely Valentines Day! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Poetic Report Card Style- A+ Cadence- A++ Imagery- A++++ Language- A+ ************* Need I say more? You definitely shine in these and as JM said.......if you make it a habit to write in this style I will be here to read them. Beautifully penned in every essence of a timeless piece of poetry. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Can I ditto Mark? *G* For I completely agree with his assessment and would give the same grades. *S* This is beautiful, Kethry! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful Keth! You've done an admirable job with this piece...speaking as a lowly slug of course! LOL and hugs to you! |
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