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Lot's Wife
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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When I became yours I assured you that I would obey, But who'd have foreseen the incredible scene of this day? Rain of brimstone and fire is so dire - Can that be what's meant? I'm a pawn in a deal that was sealed without my consent! Married children I leave. A mother's heart grieves and then breaks One longing last glance is a chance that I just have to take. Perhaps if I try hard enough one more cry will get through - Our family will then all be free to journey with you. Despair and sin don't begin describing the life I'd found Dreams are turning to dust. It seems that I must turn around! My feet are like lead. I'm not dead. There's the sharp taste of salt But I'm no pillar, I'm a river of tears I can't halt. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Within the trails of dust I leave my dreams In the streams of tears I leave my hope This is not the journey's end Through the stars of heaven I see a life of love Within this heart of scars I feel a desire In this I find promise of my tomorrow. Other than the fact that I love to read your writing because it is always so pure in it's message, I too love the way your words find their way to reaching the reader with the emotions they carry. A very heartfelt piece from you but done so in a remarkable penning of originality. Very nice to read one of yours again and now I look forward to another............say tomorrow maybe!!!  (or sooner if it strikes ya)Loved also the tie in to the biblical story.If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
suthern, you sound like you have traveled the same road as I have. When things go wrong, it is a wrong that can't be fixed! I know prayer helps, I know forgivness helps, I know looking back doesn't help. I just wanted you to know that I understand. Love and hugs, ME |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hey since this is yours I can't ditto you, so can I ditto mark and say yes this is original and touching as are all of yours, and yep another one tomorrow wouldn't be too soon  and while I am at it I will ditto ME and say yep prayer, forgiveness and not looking back helps ....but sigh.....its hard to get to that spot sometimes...maybe if someone who cares offers you a hand and a neck rub....sigh...that looking back stuff makes your neck hurt fierce ....oh.....and did I say this is great? love the ending...the correlation of pain to lot's wife...whew.....nice work lady |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Mark: What a lovely poem you've shared with me - thank you! *S* I'd be sitting here smiling even if you hadn't added such sweet compliments. *G* ME: Thank you for your understanding. *S* It was your Sun/Clouds that reminded me I had the parts of this poem buried somewhere... I just had to do a little digging and assembly. *G* jellybeans: Um-hum. *G* You're just wanting to distract me from Sybil's antics by reminding me of the Ditto Queen! LOL. Thank you so much... especially for the neck rub. *EG* (Whatcha mean that wasn't an offer? LOL) Seriously, you know your praise means much to me. *S* A slight variation of the last two lines was running through my brain at a bus stop several months ago... so of course, I had to fuss at myself to stuff it, I'm not Lot's wife! LOL. Still, that made me start thinking about WHY she turned around... She did, after all, leave children behind... so her looking back is far more excusable than mine. *S* By the way, Mark and jellybeans... was there a "pushiness" conference I missed? LOL. Thanks... I need the nagging. *G* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rain of brimstone and fire is so dire - Can that be what's meant? I'm a pawn in a deal that was sealed without my consent! ======================= One longing last glance is a chance that I just have to take. ======================= Despair and sin don't begin describing the life I'd found Dreams are turning to dust. It seems that I must turn around! My feet are like lead. I'm not dead. There's the sharp taste of salt But I'm no pillar, I'm a river of tears I can't halt. ======================= *my turn to inhale*  oh girlie you bleed divine in rhyme ... excellent write Ruth, the inner rhyme, the imagery, the well worked metaphors.. all worked with poetic perfection.. but as always with your work.. it is the emotional purge that has the most impact. and its so nice to read you here me dear When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
PUSHYYYYYYYYY???????????? NEVER!!!!!  Merely BEGGING HERE on both knees. Is it tomorrow yet? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JM: The mental image of you sniffing has me giggling. LOL. Thank you... it's good to be here. And your kind words are greatly appreciated! *S* Mark: ROFL... Careful there! *G* Ya never know what ideas I might get with you on your knees... I'm used to seeing flashing heels as a guy flees! LOL Seriously, cowboy... you're too kind... but this gal is grateful. *S* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like the power behind this piece my friend. . . speaks volumes. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This is a remarkable piece of writing. I wish I could find something to say about it that is as original and powerful as the poem itself is. The last line, especially, struck home with me. And I think you show great insight into the reasons she might have looked back. Good work! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Suthern~ this is fantastic! Excellent writing!! -SEA |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Wonderful Portrayal Mother Hen.. Take care HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sven, kcsgrandma, SEA & RG: Thank you so very much. Your comments mean a lot to me and I appreciate your praise and encouragement more thank I can say. *S* Thank you! And Little Chick: It's so good to know you're out there lurking. *S* Big hugs! *S* |
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