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Valentines Day is so sweetly cliche'
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Valentines Day is so sweetly cliche' |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
only on Valentines Day ... could it be so poetically okay ... to be so gratuitously cliche'   Come dance with me ... sweet Valentine ... for just this night ... wont you please be mine. Take my hand ... together we'll touch divine ... anticipation we'll define ... Come dance with me sweet Valentine. We'll meet in the heavens ... make love on cloud nine ... meet me there ... where the moon and stars align. I'll be you angel of temptation ... we'll cross desires line ... intensity equal to the sun's shine ... come dance with me sweet Valentine. Come kiss these lips ... sweet like raspberry wine ... drown in my kisses ... be my taste of something fine. Savior as lips and fingertips ... slowly trace tanned curve of spine ... Sigh as glistening bodies entwine ... come dance with me sweet Valentine. Surrender to this passions tide ... desire born of destiny's design. This night promises to be sublime ... come dance with me sweet Valentine. Janet Marie *and raspberry muse*  ~Secret Love~ Thou every word ... takes me higher ... lights my soul ... pure poetic inspire. Every line ... every gifted verse ... captivates and incantates ... sweet poetic curse. Hang the moon ... etch the sun ... paint the twilight ... when day is done. Write the stars ... then make them shine ... recite the sky ... till dark and light entwine. Ride the wind ... inhale the night ... make time stand still ... whisper wisdom's insight. Caress me content ... with thy touch of rhyme ... each stroke of pen ... defines intent sublime. Intrigued and inspired ... taken by the intensity ... worshiped and desired ... genuflect on bended knee. Discover thy pleasures ... in thine anticipation ... surrender to this temptation ... born of fascination. I'll need no other lover ... completely enchanted by thee ... all this heart requires or desires ... is found in thy graces of poetry. Janet Marie *you knew it was gonna be poetry..right?  *(did ya think I was really gonna tell) Happy Valentines Day to all my fellow poets and hopeless romantics ... may we always crave cliche' Love to all in Poetry Land In the evening when you see my eyes Looking back at you no disguise Im not sure who you think youll see Im just hoping youll still know that its me |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
JanetM~ Oh, my dear, sweet friend ...... I hope I haven't missed tooooo much in my absence  My dear, I have missed you and your lovely poetry. And I am glad that I managed to catch a glimpse of your "Sweet Cliche"! After all, us "hopeless romantics" often rely on cliche often! Thank you for your wonderful words. Happy Valentine's Day to you, my dear! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice and Pretty! too!!! Like the form and the message of cliché! It's sweet just Valentine's oughta be! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Has anyone ever told you that you can cliché with the best of 'em ??? I LOVE IT ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Sweet Janet Marie~ Hun, you even make cliche phrases unique and creative, heck, I'd say that this wasn't cliche though, but, very cute and romantic  Thanks so much for this offering of your heart Happy Valentine's Day! Take care, Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ohhhhhhhhh me my girlie girl....so cliche...and the first poem...sooooooooooo whewwwwwwwwww!...very very *winkie winkie*...was purrrrrrrrrfect that I was sipping my gift of Raspberry Tea while reading...and of couse GB dipped in whipped cream  Love the way you weave it baby!!!! No one can touch your poetic grace when you weave of the words of gold this way!  H~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You wove this together wonderfully! It's sweet, and perfectly adorable....and quite wry at the same time....I love this!!! too cute, YOU! |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Jan, I loved this! Take Care of yourself. ~Laura~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, That read like an aweful lot of raspberry. But I loved it. RD WW S |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I feel as if I just opened a bag a sugar and gulped it down in one swoop!!!! Hey girlie......I ain't about to share in public what that first one conjurs up in the mind but I will tell ya that my hat has a new curve in it!!! If you want to be cliche' then you go right on ahead as long as it comes out like these jewels. What a perfect day to WISH I had someone here to share this with. Oh well, cowboy will just find his chocolates in the hearts of the blue pages and enjoy the peace of mind that comes in knowing that I don't have to go to bed if I don't want to.  Course if'n I had a Valentine then........oh never mind LOL.....Poetry IS love anyway ain't it? |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I hope that my Valentine does all those things to me tonight! Secret Valentine the imagery is so potent it makes me want to be there, in that moment you capture. Very nice work! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'We'll meet in the heavens ... make love on cloud nine ... meet me there ... where the moon and stars align. I'll be you angel of temptation ... we'll cross desires line ... intensity equal to the sun's shine ... come dance with me sweet Valentine. Come kiss these lips ... sweet like raspberry wine ... drown in my kisses ... be my taste of something fine. Savior as lips and fingertips ... slowly trace tanned curve of spine ... Sigh as glistening bodies entwine ... come dance with me sweet Valentine.' 'Thou every word ... takes me higher ... lights my soul ... pure poetic inspire. Every line ... every gifted verse ... captivates and incantates ... sweet poetic curse.' 'I'll need no other lover ... completely enchanted by thee ... all this heart requires or desires ... is found in thy graces of poetry.' OK, JM....you MUST have been in my head today with the 'thou every word takes me higher...' I was JUST penning that in my head today...weird...but, anyway, this is excellent, but I guess I don't have to say that now, after all that... But, I will...fantastic imagery! I really enjoyed!sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Real men don't eat cliche.....so I guess I ain't a real man 'cause I eat yours all up!!! You're a sweetie, JM...Happy VD!! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet..........these are wonderful.........very nicely done. -SEA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great cliches poet pet.....this is excellent! Like I have come to expect from you as always a great composition!! you're VANtastic! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
After all it is Valentines day...candy and roses and hugs and kisses to you Janet...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this was perfection, JM...~S~ ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you all VERY much ... I'm ever grateful you can enjoy the "obscenely cliche'" ... for if it werent for cliche' sometimes I think I'd have no poetry. I was trying to write playing with all the rhyming words to go with Valentine... and it occured to me this holiday is one of the most cliched of all. A poets dream come true ... or worst nightmare LOL Oh well... I guess there are worse things a poet can be than cliche' right? thanks guys .. always.... and thank goodness its over ... *L* love to poetry land.. jm When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Cliche'? Why, whatever could you be talkin' about? (very innocent smile and thick southern drawl *G*) I couldn't write without them! LOL But neither could I link them together so beautifully. *S* You and your raspberry muse did an excellent job... I especially like Secret Love. *S* |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Janet my dear, Happy V-Day to you, too. As always, these are so well written. Cliche or not, your raspberry muse has blessed you, girl! Just to let you know, I'm soooo glad you're posting again. I've been dying to respond to one of your fantastic poems again. I posted my own V-Day poem (warning: shameless plug!!!)although, it's more of the breakup cliche. My former dear one and I ended our relationship a day before our anniversary, which was a day before V-Day. Look for it- (here's the shameless plug-) Best Friend, Boyfriend, Breakup (Can't I Just Get Flowers on Valentine's Like Everyone Else?!) Check it out. Much love oh poetic one, Krissie "And I wanted you to turn away. You don't remember, but I do. You never even tried..." ~Fuel |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wonderful work J.M. all I can say is cliche' away, more power to your pen, I enjoyed it. Regards, Olias. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I think that tea is filled with a little poetic magic...hugs! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, of course you are forgiven your cliches when you write them like that! You have a wonderful way with words! Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You may write cliches on such a day And when you write it's ok to say what's in your heart that tells the truth when those cliches flow from your youth. they're only words and that's a fact and when you use them from the past it reminds us all who treasure you how much we love the heart you use. Hey my poet pet this is great stuff ...we're not above using the tools that sparked the interest that cultivated this style of writing we're using...love to ya and I wish you the best as always....cause you're VANtastic!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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