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Dawn-summoner (Formerly The Zoo and After)

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Severn
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Dawn-summoner

We crossed the I 75 and journeyed
over bridges, around and past
beaten buildings, searching
for the right way, past ugly towers.

Both lost in an unfamiliar place, we laughed,
discovering our visuality - the way
our faces moved and hands talked,
the car huge yet crowded with us.

You have a fragility I didnít see until
it released through your eyes - those kind things -
your delicacy unshuttered as you self-conciously
removed your hat, ran a hand through your hair.

You were embarrassed our time was
below my expectation, worried it was not
enough. What do animals think about, you said
and felt foolish, but I felt the warmth

of your shoulder against mine while
we walked, smiling at the sparity
of wire cages, relating memories
and events in places foreign to the other.

Then you ached in that moment
I canít quite recall, and the tyres
drove us away, past the concrete,
past the trees warmly reciting winter.

You wanted me to read poetry in that bookstore
where I found ĎThe Bridges of Madison County,í
ironically. Too shy, I declined, and you bought
my favourite collection, just because it was.

I ache now, silent of you, shocked
that you are such. Before going out I stared
at watered pools made green by dye, and at a train,
whose music had ceased on the track

for some undelivered reason. When I
came back it had gone, but the
thought of you remained; My emptiness
a reminder of the flight

awaiting. Iíll fly back over the Grand
Canyon, over snow, and long roads so straight
I could measure the distance of continents.
Iíll arrive in L.A. and ascend to clouds

again. The roads will smell of heat, tar,
and haunted by you and this wintered
America, Iíll remember crows, and
jeeps and your Southern tones.

Monday came, and ice on the road,
hope. We compared the tremors of
our hands, I thought of trains and passage,
your arms - like peace - around me.

You will not rob my life, you said,
and we cried. The tears of truth faded
the course of rain from the windows, as we
sat above the dam, facing separation,

knowing there was nothing simple contained
within the sacrifice. My twenty five years and yours
of forty cannot align, yet you gave me stars
and understanding - this green moon will remember.


For you Jamie, my dear envisioner of a starred heaven, in honour of the 12th, and thanks for giving me the words for the longest poem I've ever been able to write...

© K.Mahony 2001



...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment...

T.G.M.
© Copyright 2001 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
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Tears on my cheeks....a wonderful poem Kamla.
Severn
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Thankyou Sharon - and one of the hardest...

K


...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment...

T.G.M.
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I understand.
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Sigh ...

I don't have your strength, Kamla ... when I traveled the miles and found the feeling, I just never left ... *shrug*

Wonderful writing.

Linda
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Life is short...love is rare - that's all I have to say about that!
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Sharon's right...

Be well, K...hugs..


Waft every crest upon your destined sea.
Embrace the Wave of Serendipity,
Lest its elusive arcane ecstasy
Refurl with sail for all eternity.
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your talent for penning words is as strong as the draw of your magnetism... .. and lacking your talent, I can only say it is I who must thank you, of the waking magic.

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broke my heart...oh...my lovely K....HUGS
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~I quietly read much of your work and well,...this, this example of your transportation of thoughts and images to the reader, is why. You are indeed a talented writer and one in which I will continue to read. Thanks for posting this. *Peace you.
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Kamla--to open your heart this way is to be vulnerable...a scary but wonderful place to be...thanks for sharing your trip...hugs!
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11 posted 02-14-2001 12:37 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

You have a fragility I didnít see until
it released through your eyes - those kind things -
your delicacy unshuttered as you self-conciously
removed your hat, ran a hand through your hair.
====================
I ache now, silent of you, shocked
that you are such. Before going out I stared
at watered pools made green by dye, and at a train,
whose music had ceased on the track

for some undelivered reason. When I
came back it had gone, but the
thought of you remained; My emptiness
a reminder of the flight
=====================
You will not rob my life, you said,
and we cried. The tears of truth faded
the course of rain from the windows, as we
sat above the dam, facing separation,

knowing there was nothing simple contained
within the sacrifice. My twenty five years and yours
of forty cannot align, yet you gave me stars
and understanding - this green moon will remember.
=======================

Oh my my my ...
you have taken the breath from this sharer of butterfly...
Kamala, this is outstanding ...
what a emotive intensely beautiful outpouring of your heart and soul.
amazing depth of encompassing and expressing these moments of discovery.
excellence from your pen sweet poet



In the evening when you see my eyes
Looking back at you no disguise
Im not sure who you think youll see
Im just hoping youll still know that its me
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12 posted 02-14-2001 01:12 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

K, my heart goes out to you my friend. . . this is the finest that you have ever written. . . thank you for sharing it with us. . . and I know. . . and I agree with Sharon!!




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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.
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ok, let me start with the form, this is great, the break of the 4 line verses, combined with complete sentence structure not only adds to the emphasis you bring out, but it makes it an even more interesting read.
Now on to content.....wow...the meeting of 2 friends...I haven't read it put with so much compassion and caring...wow...really nice work k. thanks for sharing this
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14 posted 02-15-2001 10:10 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is stunning... and so very painful. When so much is right but what isn't can't be ignored... the last couple of verses leave me breathless.
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It's painful but it is spectacular in form and kept me glued to the end.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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16 posted 02-18-2001 06:38 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Dear Kamala; You read this to me today, and read it so beautifully too. This is pure poetry and exquisitely written, a delight to read again. I was so blessed to be with you today. What a beautiful person you are! I do hope we meet again. Love, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.
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This is wonderful, Kamla! You certainly captured the flavor of the south and two people sharing very well..thank you for pointing it out....

Of COURSE 25 and 40 don't mix..he's much too young!!! You need a more mature guy...like me!

big silly....signing off
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It was one of the highlights of the day having heard you read this. Very touching and very beautifully expressed! HUGS
Severn
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Thankyou all for your lovely, supportive words on this piece...

time will tell hey? And 'deer - you get the jet and we'll see heh. (Not a chance bud...)

K



...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment...

T.G.M.
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