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Red Failure
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Red Failure |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
My mind overpowers my state. Failure wrote itself red on the wall. Tricking drops of wet paint run down my bedroom's wall. My eyes are barely open, but the word is inscribed on my brain. By the time the air changes, the wind will blow my chances. Occurences like this a are many, on countless occasions I stayed put. Could no even wipe it off the wall. Even if I tried,is permanent. My father used thinner, but just wasted his time. Perhaps I'll just get used to it, just like my father has. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
By the time the air changes, the wind will blow my chances. Occurences like this a are many, on countless occasions I stayed put ================ very powerful images and words ... this has a haunted confessional ache to it well written and expressed... allow me to welcome you to Passions if I have not yet done so. will look for more of your work take care jm Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
By the time the air changes, the wind will blow my chances. wow..I liked these lines too..your words gripped me...*s ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
perhaps. . . but there's always a way to get the writing off the wall. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Each post from you has been unique and interesting. You're not an easy one to figure out, huh? Looking forward to your next adventure! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I get what you're saying and even though the writings on the wall.....you can still ressurect your life of find your new love until, the writing on the wall fades away.....brilliant piece...take care!! Nathan |
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