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Martie
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0 posted 2001-02-12 01:06 AM



Fluted and Full of Light


Sigh me into the morning again love,
for I am fluted and full of light
and breathe this smile of day
for you to turn and watch.

There is delicious life
on these pillows that merge
and the shape of your head
is engraved there,
this softness where my heart turns
is still warm.

I have curved with you
into these years
and watched time changing,
each day’s passing
to shadow, crease
and color that tell me
I am fragile
and no longer new.

But you hand me your
warm words that see me
still in bright love’s glow,
and after time has drifted
past and bathed my skin,
I think that maybe I am
as lovely as your vision
for you would not say so
if dearest love
had not made it true.


© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-02-12 01:52 AM


I have curved with you
into these years
and watched time changing,
each day’s passing
to shadow, crease
and color that tell me
I am fragile
and no longer new.

But you hand me your
warm words that see me
still in bright love’s glow,
and after time has drifted
past and bathed my skin,
I think that maybe I am
as lovely as your vision
for you would not say so
if dearest love
had not made it true.
=====================

those are two of the coolest verses I have read today...
such sincere and touching promises of enduring love...
growing old together gracefully..
excellent read me girlie  

Where the touch of the lover ends
And the soul of the friend begins
There's a need to be separate and a need to be one
And a struggle neither wins

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-02-12 02:39 AM


Sigh...click click click!!!

Wow my friend - how do you do this to me hey?

K


- it was not an
unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh,
like wind in the wires, or a train distancing.

The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson

Lady Ollyne
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since 2001-01-08
Posts 337
East Coast
3 posted 2001-02-12 09:44 AM


But you hand me your
warm words that see me
still in bright love’s glow,
and after time has drifted
past and bathed my skin,
I think that maybe I am
as lovely as your vision
for you would not say so
if dearest love
had not made it true.

such beautiful words,
Lady Martie..very nice

Lady Ollyne


"O, learn to read what silent love hath writ:
To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare





[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (edited 02-12-2001).]

Lady Ollyne
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since 2001-01-08
Posts 337
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4 posted 2001-02-12 09:46 AM




This lady's finger
dost post doubly
Regretfully,
Lady Ollyne




[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (edited 02-12-2001).]

zoe
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since 2001-02-05
Posts 34

5 posted 2001-02-12 10:14 AM


*soft sigh* so softly incredibly beautiful, enjoyed this a lot martie  
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 2001-02-12 10:33 AM


I both hear a flute and see a slender, crystal goblet filled with fine champagne...a wonderful read!
Melody
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since 2001-02-12
Posts 16
England
7 posted 2001-02-12 10:57 AM


Martie this is an absolutely beautiful poem I really love it's style and imagery. You have such a wonderful special way of writing and you are cleary very talented
===================================
There is delicious life
on these pillows that merge
and the shape of your head
is engraved there,
this softness where my heart turns
is still warm.

I have curved with you
into these years
and watched time changing,
each day’s passing
to shadow, crease
and color that tell me
I am fragile
and no longer new.
========================================
I especially love these lines
Excellant
                  love
                      Melody
                        ::
But you hand me your
warm words that see me
still in bright love’s glow,
and after time has drifted
past and bathed my skin,
I think that maybe I am
as lovely as your vision
for you would not say so
if dearest love
had not made it true.



But love me for love's sake, that evermore
Thou mayst love on, through love's eternity
Elizabeth Barrett Browning

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
8 posted 2001-02-12 12:08 PM


"Martie encourages Constructive Critiques"
Haaaaaaaaaaa - only a fool would think this could be improved in ANY way -
Were any of the great poets past or present to read this - I cannot but believe that they, like I, would praise it as I am attempting to do.

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
9 posted 2001-02-12 08:02 PM


Janet--thank you for being way cool...cause that makes me smile.

Kamla--you know how I love to make you click.

Lady Ollyne--Thank you so much for the sweet reply.

Karilea--I knew you would...thanks.

Melody--what a warm and wonderful reply..thank you.

Bill--You make me blush...

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