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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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My daddy spoke in graveled voice Matter-fact No-life-of-choice and spoke of times I could not know and how he watched the cotton grow and watched a flower's bloom with dread knowing fingers bleed of bed prick of thistles fingers bled white cotton dripping droplets red and then? he smiled. and then? i wept.... to know that I am droplet kept. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh, Karen, this was just so uniquely expressed and the rhyme and flow was perfect. Into the library this goes, this is my favourite of yours, I've read it over many times already, I feel different emotions each time. The cotton/flowers blooming/red droplets were great images to use. What an ending! Please forgive me, if I am wrong, but this touches me with both sadness, but, relief at the end Take care, Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Serenity, this is a fantastic piece. The contrast of crimson and cotton white evoke thoughts of Another's blood shed that we may be made white as snow. from droplet kept |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you. I just spent the evening with my dad. and oh...I only thought I HAD A BOOK. smooches to dad....I love you. "It was a road so bad? didn't matter where it went to--didn't end up anywhere, no-how...."--W.W. Hood [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is beautiful writing, serenity.... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity Your images flourish. Wonderful write. Poeminister "It is our business to go as we are impelled." ~ D.H. Lawrence |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
and then? he smiled. and then? i wept.... to know that I am droplet kept. very beautiful..I spent the evening thinking about my Dad tonight too..and had been gathering all my poems about him to maybe do a prose piece...huggzzz ~Wynter/M "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Celeste this type of inspiration sure brings out the best from your writing mind. I really really enjoyed the excellent work in this one! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
knowing fingers bleed of bed prick of thistles fingers bled white cotton dripping droplets red and then? he smiled. and then? i wept.... to know that I am droplet kept. ================== you, me sweet are many droplets and memories kept... this is beautiful me twin .. the rhyme pattern and imagery are poetic perfection, the emotions are pure serenity ...   Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very beautiful..i much enjoyed this read..  hugs, g "maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
So So nice REAL tribute in Understanding it resides and defines a very nice read sure to inspire excellent job AT "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Tugging at heartstrings here. Beautiful thoughts, sweet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Thank you for this one! (((((((((hug)))))))))))) "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey hon...er..I am here - just a slack writer... well - only ONE ellipses!  This is lovely K - I really was moved...that last line does it all...  K |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
There isn't enough in one drop to capture the reflections of your wonder and spirit but maybe in a downpour we may taste a bit of the splendor you carry. This is a lovely write and filled with an emotion that is shared between the droplets of time and write the analogs that age in perfection. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is truly beautiful, and hauntingly lovely. So filled with love, pain, and then the wonderful ending! Thanks for shariing! . The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
please be patient with me as this time? I would like to thank EVERYONE. Melissa...thank you for popping in first, it makes me very happy to know that you continue to read my little offerings. HUGS VAS.....thank you. I understand the wisdom of what you say. Michael...many thank you's for all of your kind help with my work. I continue to read and "study" your work, and hopefully will continue to grow. Poeminister...your unfailing kindness continues to bring smiles to my face. Thank you. wynter...Isn't it wonderful for once to appreciate what we have while we have it? Thanks for reading. Hey ethome...wish I'd have listen to my Grandma Mamie more too...thank you. JM...thank you's don't cut it with us anymore...c'mere and gimme a hug, you! g....many thanks for reading! aTel...the honor belongs strictly to my Dad...he's really something. Marge...almost called you "mom" here but suddenly that felt odd here...lol..so now? I've decided to call you "moms"--for "mother of my soul"... Kathleen...poetry is all around us, just waiting for us to recognize it. HUGS and thanks. K....got the giggles...again...I...backspaced...out...a...bunch....LOL...Love to you my friend! Mark...You do say the kindest my most wonderful things...Did you recognize an old cotton farmer from Texas...smile. Glad you could meet my Dad. Rosemary...I am always beyond flattered to know that you've read my work. Thanks much my friend! and finally...Dad? I'm always gonna be your little girl. I love you, and only hope one day you will be one tenth as proud of me as I am of you. Again. I love you. (just can't seem to say that enough.) Thanks to all and HUGS TO FORUM. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
heheheh HAWHAW I KNOW you did - I just knew... love you too dear K- it was not an unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh, like wind in the wires, or a train distancing. The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well this is one place we differ, i haven't seen my dad in 24 years...sigh...oh and one more place we differ....you write incredible poetry...love this girl  |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Wonderful write Karen, Very heartfelt. Nice to see this much emotion from you. Rich |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your love for and pride in your Dad shown here is beautiful... And I love the last 4 lines! *S* |
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