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Michael G
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since 2000-06-25
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Nashville

0 posted 2001-02-10 03:52 PM


The summer sun
washed upon my skin
letting all my fears
go away on their own
The sand that pushed
against my sin
left me in
the hollow road
Can't you hear them
the fallen angels scream
can't you hear them
the ones that call to me.
The summer night
that fell on my soul
tearing at my life
while love was in control
The lonely bed
we slept to catch ourselves
from breathing another chance
we watched all go to hell
Can't you hear them
the fallen angels scream
for my final breath to come
so they can finally see
Can't you hear them
the ones who call to me
all dressed in their best
to make a fool of me.

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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
1 posted 2001-02-10 04:14 PM


I like how this reads but I really don't understand it.  Perhaps it's a picasso.
Sven
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2 posted 2001-02-11 02:14 PM


quote:
Can't you hear them
the ones who call to me
all dressed in their best
to make a fool of me.


I hear them every day. . . and they're still calling. . .

superb writing. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Charisma
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lost in blue pages
3 posted 2001-02-11 02:20 PM


.....can hear them...enjoyed reading it.

Charisma

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2001-02-11 04:05 PM


Michael,
I always enjoy your writing. There are always solutions to problems. Try to write some out who knows one might work. Sy

walker
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since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240
Florida
5 posted 2001-02-11 04:26 PM


We have to watch our backs when we're in love. It can be our worse nightmare. But it hurts sooooo good! Great poem!
Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
6 posted 2001-02-11 10:49 PM


Alot of insight in this piece.  I like this one very much.  But isn't a fool only fool if they do not learn from their mistakes??  I think you have learned your lessons well, this poem just proves it.  

  Your wheels are always turning when it comes to love...


Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-02-12 02:33 AM


The sand that pushed
against my sin
left me in
the hollow road
Can't you hear them
the fallen angels scream
can't you hear them
the ones that call to me.
The summer night
that fell on my soul
tearing at my life
while love was in control
The lonely bed
we slept to catch ourselves
from breathing another chance
we watched all go to hell
================

your poetic depth never ceases to amaze me..
not a fool ... a poet of grace.
take care gentle poet of the wind  
jm

Where the touch of the lover ends
And the soul of the friend begins
There's a need to be separate and a need to be one
And a struggle neither wins

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