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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-02-10 02:01 PM




If you'd only listen,
I'd tell you not to worry,
Because, from here,
The view is truly pleasing.
Your face and all of its expressions--
Altogether lovely.
Don't be consumed
By other opinions;
To me,
You are paradise.
When you kiss me,
I am taken far away
From this wretched place,
So occupied with its materialistic concerns.
If you'd just give me a chance,
I'd show you what our world would be
Without the problems
Accompanying superficial worries.
Believe me, Love,
You are
The unparalleled find
In their search for perfection.

(this is a repost from #10(?)...just a little fixed up with the graphic and all!   )



...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea,
oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me...


[This message has been edited by snowpants (edited 02-10-2001).]

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David2
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1 posted 2001-02-10 02:35 PM


Snowpants,
    This was beautiful. Such a touching way to allay the fears of a beloved. Excellent!
                  David2

SEA
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2 posted 2001-02-10 02:49 PM


Glad you reposted this.........I don't think I caught it the first go 'round............I like it very much..........graphic is great too!   SEA

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3 posted 2001-02-10 07:16 PM


SnowPants~
I'm blown away by the sincerity of this one -
and captured in the graphic of equal beauty.

Oh, my ... I think perhaps that's what Heaven looks like !
It was real easy to step into that serene picture.
Thank you.
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 2001-02-10 07:57 PM


ahhhhhhhh. . . thank you sp. . . I need that today. . .

wonderful. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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5 posted 2001-02-10 08:13 PM


Snowpants,

This is beautiful. You have no idea how much I needed to read something like this. Thank you very much.  

                              Dawn

snowpants
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6 posted 2001-02-10 09:15 PM


David:  thank you!  I appreciate your reply!  

SEA:  well, thanks...I'm glad you enjoyed it!  

Marge:  thank you so much for your wonderful reply!  I really appreciate it!  And, this graphic is one of my favorites, too!  Yes, it does sort of make you think of heaven, doesn't it??  

Sven:  it is my pleasure to share it!  I'm glad you liked it!  

Dawn:  it means a lot to me that I could touch someone with my writing!  Thank you for reading!!  

sp  


...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea,
oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me...

Mistletoe Angel
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7 posted 2001-02-10 09:46 PM


Oh, I loved this one so very much, I found myself musing as I read this, getting visions in my head! Excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing, my friend!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2001-02-10 11:54 PM


Beautiful write.  Very lovely graphic too.  Enjoyed.

Poeminister

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O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
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9 posted 2001-02-11 12:15 PM


Love...'unparalleled find'.  Love the poem.  Looking forward to more.
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10 posted 2001-02-11 03:13 AM


i couldn't agree more with the rest...beautifull piece of writting, so deep with alot of meaning.  

keep on writting:P

pix

snowpants
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11 posted 2001-02-11 03:42 AM


Noah:  well, thank you!  I am glad you could find inspiration in this!  

Poeminister:  thanks!  I'm glad you enjoyed it!!  

JLR:  yeah...that's my favorite part too!  Thank you so much!  

pix:  thank you so much for reading!  I appreciate your reply!  

sp  


...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea,
oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me...

Mark Bohannan
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12 posted 2001-02-11 10:32 AM


And now the cowboy swims in the pool of serene calm.  What lovely thoughts your words paint in this one my friend.  It is easy to see why one would want to escape with you.

If you find yourself stranded in a storm
...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together

snowpants
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13 posted 2001-02-11 12:16 PM


Why thank you so much, my dear friend!  Your words are a great encouragement to me.  I appreciate your thoughtful comments...

sp  


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

Paula Finn
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14 posted 2001-02-16 12:56 PM


I did miss this in 10...how very lovely...sometimes we get so caught up in the way we look that we forget that real beauty is inside
Irish Rose
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15 posted 2001-02-16 02:25 PM


I look for your poems!! They are so beautiful and inspirational.




"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


walker
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16 posted 2001-02-16 05:07 PM


What a beautiful way to love one so dearly, as to want to protect them from the world. And what a way to give that confort to another. I think that love should be about consolation, then we would all be happy. I really enjoy this one, because it makes me think of the times that I have felt the same for my children when they have a hard time at school. Thanks, its lovely.
ethome
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17 posted 2001-02-16 05:12 PM


So tender, so sincere, so beautiful, so wonderful to read and absorb...excellent!!
snowpants
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18 posted 2001-02-16 05:57 PM


Paula: why thank you! I didn't think I'd see this one again! and, you are right...what matters is in the heart.

Kathleen: thank you so much! You are too kind! I'm glad you enjoy my writing!

walker: yes, you are absolutely right...shield the ones we love from the world...interesting thought. Thank you for reading!

ethome: thank you! I appreciate your kind reply!!


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

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