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ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06
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Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

0 posted 2001-02-10 09:18 AM


Flames seek you rise within  
  Underneath burning away remnants
    Never seen by those who breathe to
      Eat the dead from the living heart and
        Revel in such ritual feast which brings
          All to dust sing innvoke the BloodCant
            Loves bleating heart adorning altar red

  Piling up the HeartBones
    Yon mountain man made shrine
      Reaving all hope its presence denies
        Escape from cannibal eyes Le Sacre Tonight  


[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-10-2001).]

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Nan
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1 posted 2001-02-10 09:32 AM


Aside for your propensity for acrostics, and your obvious ability to master the form, you've got a pretty intense message enfolded here...

My favorite lines..."Revel in such ritual feast which brings/All to dust sing innvoke the BloodCant"

Nicely done, ATel...


Waft every crest upon your destined sea.
Embrace the Wave of Serendipity,
Lest its elusive arcane ecstasy
Refurl with sail for all eternity.

ATelamon
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Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up
2 posted 2001-02-10 09:52 AM


Why thank you for your reading and comments. I appreciate you reading these. As for mastering the form, I do not know about that, I just posted an acrostic as first post and decided to see how long I would or could keep that up. Just a phase I guess.

I really appreciate your words on intensity of message. To me that outweighs form by far.

I enjoyed your doubleA and palindrome poem. There is a reply beneath. I do enjoy the formats with a greater potential of mult-dimensionality.

Thanks again.
AT




[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-10-2001).]

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