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ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06

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Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

0 posted 2001-02-10 06:26 AM

      Into the siren wilds
    Climbed the vagabond madrigal he
  Ever seeking for one true eternal spring

  Head high staring down the sun
    Eyes burning addiction heralds on
      Assuages then burns black living eye
        Reeling blind maddened downward fall
          Torn pieces he awaits sols burning fate

[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-10-2001).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-02-10 07:16 AM

very well done..
impressive imagery and vocabulary choices.
unique presentation of acrostic form

Heaven bound on wings of love,
there's so much that you can rise above.
I surrender heart and soul,
sacrificed to a higher goal.
~DepechMode~

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-02-10 11:20 AM

ATelamon~
Vivid imagery in this acrostic presentation.
Wonderful portrayal.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06

Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

3 posted 2001-02-10 11:43 AM

I thank you both. Your words are very kind and highly appreciated.

AT

While it may be true that "No man is an island..." You must admit there are some damn big peninsulas out there.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2001-02-10 05:25 PM

Interesting..James

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

5 posted 2001-02-10 08:07 PM

"staring down the sun" brings this poem to life. A nicely written piece ~ thank you.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-02-10 08:45 PM

Fine imagery and use of acrostic form.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

7 posted 2001-02-10 09:32 PM

ice hearts freeze
in moonswept breeze
while passions are in drift.
your lines entwine
'til hearts will cease,
and others soon will lift.
ice hearts
ice hearts
so cold, on shores
of freezing wamth....
hope yours endures.....

thanks for the inspiration... hope you don't mind my spontaneous verse as a reply.... your poem was very well written and had important messages woven in the stanzas and lyrical quality of it....

thank you for the read

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

8 posted 2001-02-10 11:08 PM

I'm impressed with your acrostic, you penned this to perfection! Boy, do I ever relate. Well done! This is by far your best

Take care,
Melissa~

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

9 posted 2001-02-10 11:24 PM

Very moving..deep, and I felt like I was right next to you...sharing the experience - thanks for the read.

K

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ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06

Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

10 posted 2001-02-10 11:47 PM

Thanks to all. Your comments are quite kind.

As for the spontaneous verse: I really like that. I do much the same. And it is very pleasant to inspire any words.

Thanks again.

While it may be true that "No man is an island..." You must admit there are some extremely large peninsulas out there.

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