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Poeminister
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0 posted 2001-02-09 04:11 PM


Love Sees

Love sees the right route
though not through the outer eyes
Love is Clairvoyant





[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-10-2001).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-02-09 04:14 PM


When you are right, you're very good....
Charisma
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2 posted 2001-02-09 05:12 PM


wonderful thoughts....loved it my friend.

Charisma

Poeminister
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3 posted 2001-02-09 06:37 PM


Thank you Sunshine and Charisma.
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4 posted 2001-02-09 08:35 PM



The last line really caught me, i really like this!

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5 posted 2001-02-09 09:38 PM


definately.............perfectly said     SEA
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6 posted 2001-02-09 10:28 PM


I believe you are very right, yet if love be clairvoyant and blind at the same time, are there merely lies in the seeing?
Meadowmuse
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7 posted 2001-02-10 06:58 PM


I like your subtle use of rhyme within this piece (and your choice of words, naturally). (o:

Your work is always so thoughtfully composed.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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8 posted 2001-02-10 07:58 PM


this is excellent. . . but I wonder just how clairvoyant love is. . .  

good job. . .

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kcsgrandma
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9 posted 2001-02-10 11:19 PM


This is  nice.     Isn't love clairvoyant in that it sees deep into the heart, where nobody but a lover can see?  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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10 posted 2001-02-11 02:51 AM


PoeMinister~

Gaze in crystal ball
Heart surpasses ritual
Love knows all sees all


~*Marge*~


*Thanks for the musing inspiration~


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tracie66
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11 posted 2001-02-11 02:52 AM


Lovely senryu PM
well done
~HUG~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



ethome
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12 posted 2001-02-11 06:45 AM


Very very well done...this is a talent I can't seem to capture but you have written this so very well!!

Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination!

ATelamon
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13 posted 2001-02-11 08:13 AM


Ah yes, methinks that love is blind to reason. Yet sees so clearly infinite possibilities.

Perhaps love is but near-sighted.

Nicely done.



[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-11-2001).]

Severn
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14 posted 2001-02-11 01:13 PM


Really well done...I am finicky over haikus and senryu's - but this one is great!

K


- it was not an
unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh,
like wind in the wires, or a train distancing.

The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson

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