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In Rhythm With the Rain
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In Rhythm With the Rain |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 ~In Rhythm With the Rain~ Humid breeze comes in ... 'cross window sill, summer storm breaks the silence of still. By candle glow ... jasmine incense burns ... lovers embrace, desire yearns. wine dipped finger tips, trace and tease ... slightly parted moistened lips. Butterfly kisses on lids of closed eyes, mouth on curves of neck ... bring on contented sighs. Jasmine and musk mix, sweet scent of glistening skin, touch this fire ... taste this sin. Hands caress ... small of back, bend of knee, bodies arch in ecstasy. Twisted sheets, legs entwined, pleasure found ... then defined. Rain dances on roof, in rhythm slow, lulls all to sleep ... satiated in afterglow. Janet Marie ~ache of again~ under 3 am moon, (again) comes this ache ... rest now forgotten, poetic words to forsake. my eyes know (again) tonight ... they'll see no sleep. their burden is heavy, as is the secret I keep. like Mardi Gras heat ... this ache steams my skin, a thirst unquenched ... a hunger, unfed from within. the night air hangs thick, his scent comes in on humid breeze. from this ache (again) tonight ... I'll find no ease. any trace of him ... brings on this slow burn. a moth to his flame, (by my choice) I guess I'll never learn. bayou storms rise up ... sultry rain comes in slow. I can still hear his voice, in whispers, low. taste his lips, feel his gentle touch ... (what I lack) is knowing how to let go ... of something so fine and needed so much. Janet Marie ~*~*~*~*~*~ 3 am by Matchbox20 she says it's cold outside and she hands me my raincoat she's always worried about things like that she says it's all gonna end and it might as well be my fault and she only sleeps when it's raining and she screams and her voice is straining she says baby it's 3 am I must be lonely when she says baby well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes says the rain's gonna wash away I believe it ~*~*~*~*~ **reposts from 8 ... cuz its raining here and I'm feeling it  (or is it the raspberry tea)  Heaven bound on wings of love, there's so much that you can rise above. I surrender heart and soul, sacrificed to a higher goal. ~DepechMode~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-09-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
like music and guess what? it's raining here too...windows open. I love the sound.and I still say you write longing gracefully and delicately NOT A TRAIN WRECK...it just feels like a train wreck...  Hugs to heart... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yep i agree, 'gracefully longing' is perfect for this, course so is beautiful, erotic...and ...sigh |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet Marie, You are a wonderful poetess but to answer this I'd have to let Randy Dragon out of his cell. LOL |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sensual, romantic, very beautiful. Wonderful writing. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
this was so lovely!!!!! May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
and all I can say is *wow*....fabulous write....as usual an excellent piece. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet Marie after reading this just once, I have had a monster hot flash! The photo looks like the view from my Texas front door. I love all of this, dear girl and will look for more. Hugs, ME |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Janet...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sen ... lol ... yes feels like ... but then me thinks me should expect it ... always laying on the tracks and thank ya me twin ... for seeing grace in me words(and for the inspire to write in "serenity structure") ... its the perfect display for me infamous 3 am ache. heart hugs back to ya  jellybeans ... thank you poetess for the lovely compliments ... and for the sigh SY-babes ... LOL ... well all I have to say to that is ... Randy has to have some fun once in awhile ... me gator-girlie muse snuck out and inspired these lil dittys Just keep Randy dragon away from the raspberry tea... *winkiewinkie* Poeminister ... I thank you sir for the kind words and stopping by to read. Whispers Caress ... thank you for the lovely reply. Charisma ... thank you dear for the wow and the excellent ME ...LOL ... sorry about the hot flashes...try some tea ... so glad you enjoyed ...Holly told me about those raging hormones *wink* ... me thinks I have the same thing when I write like this. thank you for the great reply. SBJ .. thank you for the nice reply poet sir. thanks all ... some days ya just gotta play in the rain Heaven bound on wings of love, there's so much that you can rise above. I surrender heart and soul, sacrificed to a higher goal. ~DepechMode~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-09-2001).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
REPOST? REPOST? Where was I when this went around the first time....!?! WOW...loving every line....was going to say...way to go....until I saw, you already WENT there with a repost! JM...NOW I must delve into your past....for sure....to see all that I haven't seen and bug you like all get out to repost again! Wow! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Such sensual feelings...and written so beautifully, girl...I guess that's what leads to the ache, huh? Sigh...the rain is not to blame, but may as well keep time to the flicker of the candle's glow. Hugs! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ahhhhhhhh........perfect reading for a rainy day like it is today!! Wonderful, as always! ~~~ enjoy yourself ~~~ it's later than you think! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Humid breeze comes in ... 'cross window sill, summer storm breaks the silence of still. By candle glow ... jasmine incense burns ... lovers embrace, desire yearns.' Whoa...between the song that I'm listening to and these excellent lines, JM, I am seriously blown away. Thanks for reposting these...I didn't catch them the first time around! Love 'em!! sp  ...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea, oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
oops...almost forgot...lovin' the sunset graphic too!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Positively lovely ! *Hugs* Sipping that rapenaryberry tea ! ~*Marge*~ [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 02-09-2001).] |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
Both poems are beautiful, one full of love, the other full of sadness for the loss. You are a great writer! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ ...................Love.............love.........love these...........touch the heart......ya, you know that ache........ SEA |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet as usual I love your work...brings a smile or a tear...either way it's great. So pleased I decided I couldn't live without you guys anymore :> Dee |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Janet, Very reflective, well done. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
vandana ... thank you Sun ... LOL ... thank you much for such an enthusiatic reply ... you go looking thru my old stuff and your gonna need tylenol with that tea LOL ...good luck sweet poet. Martie...not the rain? ... ok then it is the tea .. and yes.. you know me ...and me moody moth muse...we love the pretty blue flame ..thank you sweets Sunny ... thank you for the wonderful.. always nice to see your name here SP ...thank you for being "blown away" ...so what song where ya listening to? Margie ... thank ya dear poetess and watch out .. the tea has a kick Chelsea ... welcome new poet and thank you so much for such a kind reply and compliment. Sea ...thank you me girlie...and yes... what would our poetry be with out the "ache" Dee .. hey you ..so great to see your name back here... thank you always for the sweet replies. Daniel ... thank you poet sir... so nice to see your name here too thank you all muchly Heaven bound on wings of love, there's so much that you can rise above. I surrender heart and soul, sacrificed to a higher goal. ~DepechMode~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Janet Marie~ I am a lover of the rain, this is very beautiful with just the right touch of being sensual....you are indeed a wonderful writer.....be well... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautiful expressions here, Janet. It rained here all day but it has turned to snow tonight - somehow it doesn't seem as cold, now. Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
GE ... thank you always for such wonderful replies and compliments M, hey you ...yeah...what is it about the rain that makes us want to be all wet LOLthank you for the great reply and the big smile seeing your name here brought. thanks to all for endulging me ache once again Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
This poet needs a warning preface - you may require a cold shower... You may say 'tit for tat' = and I'd be speechless - so I'll just say - I'll nestle this away - for days I want to be warmed clear through |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was tempted to skip the steaminess just like I'm doing the valentines... don't need a reminder of what I don't have. *S* But I don't do skips very well. *G* And the longing in the second poem is something I know well... As always, the writing is excellent! *S* |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, both these pieces were lovely and tastful.. very discriptive feelings. They sure create a wishful hunger, in such discriptive touch. but tasteful. They make you want to taste, yes taste... hmmmm how many different ways can I say taste. Parker |
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