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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
MorningIntoxication's flame no longer flies, I see the world through drips of dulling wax. These brittle blows of winter's sickly sighs warm not the blade of grief's descending axe. No more in evening's arms shall I recite or stir mere words into companion verse, for words cannot replace a bathing light. I crave the draping dark I used to curse. For through the dismal rolling of the earth no love in morning's moment shares my bed. And stilled, the will for breath and beauty's birth, I rise but know that I am waking, dead ~ Claire |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Claire.. This is such a powerfully gripping piece, and I do hope that you are not the focus in it. But if you are, my thoughts are with you, and this one touched me like no other. I wish you the best, my friend. ~~~ enjoy yourself ~~~ it's later than you think! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My goodness! Your turn of a phrase is excellent. This is sadly elegant. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Your grace of language lights the page even as darkness clings to every phrase. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Claire , A haunting image . For you ,these lines . Know that you are much loved if not in flesh but in the spirit that you have portrayed for those who with your words you have en-meshed shall hold you close until the end of days Doc |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Bittersweet or not, Claire - Your work is always wonderfully crafted.. Enjoyed the read muchly, my friend..  Waft every crest upon your destined sea. Embrace the Wave of Serendipity, Lest its elusive arcane ecstasy Refurl with sail for all eternity. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
your elegance continues to amaze and delight me my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have so missed the imagery you wend....this is, as others have said, elegance, but then....you are Claire, and write like no other.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are an amazing poet. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hi, everyone. Thank you ALL so much for your kind words, responses, e'mails. Isn't it wonderful, taking thoughts and feelings and experiences and images and turning them all into verse? It is a cleansing, rejuvinating, healing activity, I believe, if we allow it to be. Admittedly much of the motivation for this piece is borne of personal circumstance and emotion, but please do not fret, I am fine. You know...just writing poetry. (o: Doc, your verse is lovely and so sweet. A special thank you, to you. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Eloquentia Perfecta. Love it Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Loneliness some claim is down to luck, A die once cast is never set in stone And judging each reply, each sweet remark A heart so true shall never be alone. Thanks for the chance to read and reply. Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh, Claire, this is exquisitely sorrowful. The last verse just moved me, I relate all too well. You truly have a gift Into the library this goesTake care, Melissa~ |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
This is so Shakesperian, wow, how do you do it? I was really blown away by your talent, your words are lovely and dark |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Poeminister, Craig, Melissa, Chelsea, thank you for reading and letting me know you enjoyed this poem. Craig, thanks for your verse. It's awfully sweet, but I am fine, I promise. This is simply a poem. (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I was pretty sure you were ok, I just thought I’d show you that my writing hasn’t improved. Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Gripping evidence of turning one's life into words that may be felt by all who read. Not many can capture the feeling properly but I don't know of anyone that does it with the mastery of the language better than you. Very nicely penned and expressed as always. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful poem... it defines lonely and does so well. *S* |
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