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OLIAS
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0 posted 2001-02-08 02:43 PM


The Lake

Take me back to the lake,
Our neatly folded white flesh,
Shivering, jean pool,
Where homework left undone,
And my first kiss, were my only fears,
There, days stretched,
From one heat hazed shore to the other,
And Swallows and Amazons were gods,
We lived their lives, and dreamed their dreams,
And summer was infinate.

Take me back to the Lake,
My second love,
My first, a man and a woman,
Who promised the earth,
And delivered.
A childhood of magic,
Of Camelot,
Lark and lapwing egg, discovered,
My fathers hands,
Spinning brass bar into pawn and golden Knight.

Take me back to the Lake,
That deep serene memory,
Of indigo pinafores,
Sprinkled with galaxies of flour dust,
My mothers arms,
Cradling me from the pangs of puberty,
Rose bowl lips,
Smoothing my adolescent path,
A gentle coaxing,
Into my place in the world.

Take me back to the Lake,
Any lake will do,
Sky and water enfold me,
Let me look deep
Into times reflection,
To find, a boy,
A man, and a woman,
And bright brass castles,
Towering over heat hazed shores,
There, Swallows and Amazons are gods.


© Copyright 2001 Mick Yates - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-02-08 02:44 PM


This....is so lovely....

Krawdad
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2 posted 2001-02-08 05:58 PM


Warm summer dreams and memories . . .
I enjoyed this.
Thanks for sharing, OLIAS.

OLIAS
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3 posted 2001-02-08 10:14 PM


Sunshine,

Its lovely of you to reply, as I bare my adolescent soul, I'm touched thank you  

p.s someone check out the smiley for support O.M.G. I don't think thats quite right, we call it something different in the u.k.

Krawdad,

Thanks for your kind reply it was much appreciated.


Take care
Olias.

Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2001-02-09 06:42 AM


What a wonderful piece of poetry this is.  I truely loved each and every line of this one.  The flow of it made it really easy to get follow and get lost in it's words. Great write.

ps........I know what you mean by the smiley though.....been sort of afraid to use that one myself.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2001-02-09 09:47 AM


Hey you!!   ..so nice to see your name here again ...
wonderful poem of memories..
excellent imagery.
well done poet sir
take care
jm

Heaven bound on wings of love,
there's so much that you can rise above.
I surrender heart and soul,
sacrificed to a higher goal.
~DepechMode~

OLIAS
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Pearl city Iowa
6 posted 2001-02-11 09:52 PM


Mark,
Sorry its taken so long to reply, I've been earning my crust, thank you for your kind comments, they are much appreciated...big lmao at the smiley too.

Regards
Olias.

J.M.

Hello, back again like a bad penny , sorry for not replying sooner, there are so many new poets and the output of work is so high its impossible to keep up, Thank you for your wonderful support as always poet friend, you make every return a pleasant one.

Take care
Olias.

Mike
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7 posted 2001-02-15 10:24 PM


enjoyed muchly. A pleasure to read.
JLR
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8 posted 2001-02-15 10:40 PM


I read this the first time you posted!!!!!
Must have been too caught up in myself to respond then but I remember it. I loved the youth of it...wondered, not that it matters (just I think too much)...if that youth was still with you or simply a wonderfully expressed memory? Either way I walked through your words as they floated from your mind---and I was there. And it made me miss so many things, so many people. Thank you for your reply earlier.....and thanks for (by fate) having me read this again. It's all about love...no matter how it turns out.

OLIAS
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9 posted 2001-02-16 12:21 PM


Mike,
Thank you sir, for your kind reply.

JLR

We meet again, Thank you for your kind comments, this piece is very close to my heart, I'm young enough to remember my boyhood but old enough to forget some of the details lol. If that answers your question. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Regards to you both,
Olias.

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