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Predilection (how soon will you forget)
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Predilection (how soon will you forget) |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
“i think i’m in love with a year that never existed” and time passed with its traumas, how often her dreams could see a future through its paper-bag eyes and its hazy streetlamp sadness burning its anger through morning but how long will you remember, and how soon will you forget the ties which held us, leather and gold and suede ribbons lapping the sky as the chains undid themselves in a warm synesthesia when our anger shouted red and i cried. or if i didn’t know. and how many times will the sirens sing if i hang my ribbon on the door? if i purse my lips and proclaim my intolerance in ivory and lavender and if the petals fall in the dependence of my survival if i had a survival at all and if halfway down the lane this morning i were to decide i didn’t need predilection to cloak the hole if i would not know otherwise without you and if i have already forgotten in the midst of this afternoon, if i have spun your words around my finger like cloth on a singer or a trail of teacups with their colors resounding, i think i’m in love with a year that never existed had it been a year at all, and if i promise not to remember i wonder how soon you will forget. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"and if i promise not to remember i wonder how soon you will forget." I know just how this feels..........absolutely wonderful write  -SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I love the flow and feel of this. I don't fully understand its intracacies, but I feel it has a melancholy, a longing for someone and a lost relationship. It is so well done, I don't think a full explanation is necessary. Maybe it's like the absolute beauty of someone sitting with another, in their sorrow, and weeping with them though neither speaks, full sensation of the pain and caring abounds in their comaraderie. Well done!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AuroraRain~ I enjoy the way you work your phrases. Very, very thought provoking ... nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Wonderful, Robin......Have missed your poetry! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
thank you. and my name is not robin, if that is what you meant.  |
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