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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2001-02-07 05:24 PM



Dreaming dreams
Scheming schemes
Eyes wide open
Or are they

Loving you
And the view
Just we two
Or are we

What is love
Is it a dove
Of peace
Most everlasting
Or can we share
A love so bare
Give wings to roots
We’re clasping

I know it’s real
For I can feel
Unselfish
With the real

I know the deal
You can’t conceal
Despite my bed’s
Aloneness
My arms too
My eyes their view
Of empty skins caress

Yet ears convince
My mind they mince
And tear my soul apart
You voice succeeds
And fills my needs
Takes chill from my heart



[This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 02-07-2001).]

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doreen peri
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1 posted 2001-02-07 06:18 PM


"You voice succeeds
And fills my needs
Takes chill from my heart"

enjoyed this immensely, bill..... it's well written and clearly straight from the heart.... i loved the ending lines i quoted above...

and to answer your question? nothing's real ... or is it? *wink*  

Martie
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2 posted 2001-02-07 08:11 PM


Bill--so many questions...sometimes what is a dream is sweeter than what is real...and sometimes dreams are nightmares...yet, what is real, I believe...is a feeling, no mater what its source.  Thoughtfilled poem.
Wilfred Yeats
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3 posted 2001-02-08 09:10 AM


Doreen -
what can I say - I was "in a mood" - I feel certain you understand ~S~ - Thank you

Martie-
It's obvious you understand me ~S~ thank you

Sunshine
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4 posted 2001-02-08 09:26 AM


just the sound of the words "deja vu" offer up a mystical sensation all their own...

as does this fine piece....

Well done Mr. Yeats....

doreen peri
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5 posted 2001-02-08 09:30 AM


... yes... i totally understood... completely identified with this... for a minute i wondered if i wrote it..  
lucky
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6 posted 2001-02-08 10:40 AM


Bill,

Déjà vu... you do know I'd never steal from you... Your style and mine, shall I say are a bit different... And I don't think I'm up for a change. Another good write Bill but I could never do as you... I think it was all those drugs back in he sizties you know college daze and haze... Must have fized my head.

Your great, dale

Cerenity
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7 posted 2001-02-09 06:22 PM


Hi Wilfred,

Very thought provoking, this I loved, thank you so much.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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8 posted 2001-02-09 06:48 PM


thoughtful.... very nice

~Maria~


Wilfred Yeats
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9 posted 2001-02-10 12:39 PM


Karilea-
Mystical - I think of Yogi Berra: "Deja vu - all over again" ~G~ - thanks (really)

Doreen-
Thank you Your reply constitutes as high a compliment as I could concieve

Dale-
No way - I love what you write - it is coherant to me w/o any funny stuff ~G~
Thank You

Cerenity- Moon Dust-
It was the mixed thoughts I had that provoked the write - ~S~ thank you

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