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Portrait of Good-bye

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0 posted 02-06-2001 08:30 PM       View Profile for athena4   Email athena4   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for athena4

           Portrait of Good-bye

And so,
here we are, two strangers once again.
Standing face to face
the way we did the first time.
And now,
we are holding onto the last time,
as we say good-bye
and watch the chapter turn its final page,
and fade to black.

Maybe in another time,
in another place
it could have ended differently.
I wish you could have really known me,
...before you knew me.
I wish I could have told you the things
I can only write on paper.
I am not the fragile Cinderella
that you saw me as.
I am alot stronger than you know.

But for a time,
when all my dreams turned to blue
you were my great escape.
You brought out the best in me
when I thought I had nothing left to give anyone.
You showed me that being in your arms
could rescue me from my lost horizon.
And in your eyes,
I saw beauty
...where before there was none.
Your gentle passion
quelled my aching fury.
Your laughter
gave me back my smile.

Maybe on some dark night,
when we're both in the shadows of the same moon
and you're alone in your mind,
you will remember me.
And perhaps,
for a moment
you'll long to feel the fire one more time
and you'll close your eyes
...and touch me again

And for me,
I won't look back.
Only when my arms remember the gentle secret
they once held,
...will the beauty remain.
And so,
we will walk away with nothing.
Only a surrealistic memory
of a portrait we painted only for each other
that no one will ever see,
...and we will never paint again.
© Copyright 2001 athena4 - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 02-06-2001 08:37 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Looking back can be very emotional and rough sometimes and you have painted a very vivid portrait with your words.  Wonderful read.  I especially liked the flow in this one.

If you find yourself stranded in a storm
...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together
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2 posted 02-06-2001 08:41 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

You lent your heart to the page, and it bespeaks well of your love, and in writing...

well done...
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3 posted 02-06-2001 08:47 PM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

I wish I had written this...I know no greater compliment to give you.  Thank you.  You are in my library.
Robert Joseph
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4 posted 02-06-2001 09:15 PM       View Profile for Robert Joseph   Email Robert Joseph   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Robert Joseph

Elise, this is excellent, you take the reader straight to the heart of the matter.
I look forward to reading more of your work.

Robert Joseph
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since 12-26-1999
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5 posted 02-06-2001 09:18 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

Wow! This is so well expressed and deep from the heart.  Just wow!  Into the library this goes!    

Take care,
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6 posted 02-06-2001 10:37 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Elise, this is wonderful. . . full of real emotions and tender wishes. . . I absolutely love it. . .

excellent my friend. . .  


To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.
passing shadows
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7 posted 02-12-2005 02:46 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

good write
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