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Charisma
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0 posted 2001-02-06 04:38 PM




Fluffy Clouds

Angels wings spreading
covering serenity
inside fluffy clouds
gentle touch of innocence
melting thoughts of heavens light


Charisma





[This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 02-06-2001).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-02-06 07:02 PM


Charisma~
My ... do you ever live up to your charismatic name with this one !
Just beguiling.
What a lovely, lovely Tanka.
You are blessed with the gift for this style, my friend.
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 2001-02-06 08:43 PM


I do not attempt Tanka because I would not compete with you, my friend...you do this with honor, and you do it very well...

and someday, I have a story to share with you....

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3 posted 2001-02-06 09:26 PM


Chrisma,
Good one enjoyed.

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4 posted 2001-02-06 09:29 PM



A lovely tanka!  I love the thought of angel wings cascading beauty over fluffy clouds  

Take care,
Melissa~

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5 posted 2001-02-06 09:32 PM


Charisma,
Lovely vision.  Beautifully done.

Poeminister  

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6 posted 2001-02-06 10:00 PM


Absolute beauty here!  A well done write!

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-Tim Robbins

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7 posted 2001-02-06 10:57 PM


Anytime that I need a little serenity in my day, all I have to do is find one of your works and I know instantly I will find peace and beauty to dwell in.  Lovely Tanka my friend.  Your words are so rich in the imagery and natural beauty of God's gifts to us.

If you find yourself stranded in a storm
...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together

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8 posted 2001-02-06 11:02 PM


I can only echo the rest, Charisma...it is a beautiful form and you do it so well.........
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9 posted 2001-02-06 11:28 PM


beautiful Charisma...loved it..such a pretty pic...

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10 posted 2001-02-06 11:35 PM


I've been above this scene often and it's always awesome.  Great scene about which to write, nice choice of form.
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11 posted 2001-02-06 11:37 PM


pretty and cute, like that school girl I had a crush on back when I was five
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12 posted 2001-02-07 08:51 AM


Marge: thank you my dear friend for your always kind and wonderful responses.

Karilea: I think that you would these style very good yourself as I know how you can weave words with magic.......and I'll look forward to that story my friend.

Seymour: thank you I am glad that you enjoyed it.

Melissa: Oh yes I do love that too... wonderful thought right....

Poeminister: thank you for the beautyful my friend

Sunlit Soul: thank you for your kind comment, and Welcome at passions.

Mark: And I am so glad that you really enjoy these simply forms from me, it is always good to know that people really enjoy them. thank you for your always wonderful comments my dear friend.

Balladeer: thank you my dear friend  

Victoria: I am so glad that you loved it, thanks my friend

VAS: yes I think it must be an awesome sight....you're blessed that you have the change to see them often. thank you for your wonderful reply.

Eaglescorpion: thank you for your kind comment. and sometimes little words brought up some memories....just a simple touch of words.


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13 posted 2001-02-09 02:15 AM


yes...a wonderful tanka and I agree ,,you are the star of this style poetry.
Huggs,

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko



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14 posted 2001-02-09 07:09 AM


thank you Koko.....but I think these would be my last one, as I lost my selfconfidence totally

thank you for you always nice reply

Charisma

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